Talk:St. Agnes Hospital (Raleigh, North Carolina)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 02:37, 20 August 2022 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Some copy tweaks are needed; the Site ruins section, on the other hand, will require a couple of paragraphs of new prose to incorporate a series of newspaper references I'm including along that will firm up much of the post-1961 history of this building. This is a bit unusual, but I recognize that the purpose of my Newspapers.com subscription is to build up Wikipedia. (Thanks, WP:TWL!) 7-day hold to Indy beetle. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 03:06, 20 August 2022 (UTC)

Copy changes

Lead

• Would an infobox be appropriate?
• The hospital and an associated nursing school were founded in after — Founded in when?
  • Removed "in" - opening date already mentioned a few sentence before.
• By the mid-1950s, the hospital was struggled to fund advancements — choose "was struggling" or "struggled"
  • "Struggling" fixed
• The hospital building was condemned in 1995 — I assume a typo for "1959". Comma is needed after: see User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences.
  • Fixed - 1955.

Creation

• "Raleigh, North Carolina" needs MOS:GEOCOMMA after
  • Done.
• the week after it opened, and within six months drop this comma
  • Done.
• and on April 21 the following year the nursing school, I'd like to see an "of" after "21" and a comma after "year" to aid reading
  • Done.
• February 1, 1909 needs an MOS:DATECOMMA after. Several other dates need this, too.
  • done.
• The institution was backed by Raleigh's white community, and during one 1922 funding drive received contributions This is a commas in sentences issue. I'd like to see it structured differently. The institution was backed by Raleigh's white community; during one 1922 funding drive, it received contributions...
  • Done.
• ...grand jury." This is a sentence fragment, so period after quotation mark. See MOS:INOROUT Same item in next sentence.
  • done.
• Comma after "full operations". I clipped the Newspapers.com reference.
  • Done.

Site ruins

It looks like the building had some use after this, for storage and one senior program, and there was an attempt to use federal funds to rehab the building in the 1990s and another attempt to rehab it as administrative space, which turned into a much-delayed quagmire. The number of references I have turned up (while understanding not everyone has NP.com) will likely result in some big work on the Legacy section.) Every reference after this sentence is fully formed and ready for insertion.

• • I've added the information I think is most relevant to the building here.; it's other uses and the suspension of the renovation in 2001. -Indy beetle (talk) 07:15, 20 August 2022 (UTC)

Images

• The images are all appropriately tagged (either PD-expired or freely licensed). They do need alt text.
  • Alt text added.
• Earwig turns up no issues.
• Run IABot once you've added the 8 refs I've given you.
  • Forgive me, I have no idea how to run a bot. -Indy beetle (talk) 07:14, 20 August 2022 (UTC)

  I'll do it this time: the link is [1]. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 07:46, 20 August 2022 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.