Talk:Squeal (song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 14:14, 21 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

For this part (time after the commercial failure of No Doubt in 1992.), I would say “due to” rather than “after” as I think it would fit better.
For this part (their standard instruments, "Squeal"'s instrumentation), you can replace the song’s title with “its” to avoid repetiton as you already repeat the title quite a bit in thes paragraph. Also, all of the quotation marks and the aprostrophe look quite messy.
For this sentence (The lyrics of "Squeal" describe a female criminal who is under fire when her partner betrays their trust and reveals her behavior to the police.), I think you can just say “The lyrics” as it is clear from context that you are referencing this song.
For the ALT text (A black-and-white photograph displaying a policeman questioning a couple of individuals.), it seems that more than just questioning is going on in the image, particularly given the placement of the woman lol.

For this part (work on an upcoming album,), I would replace “an upcoming” with “another”.
For this part (Guitarist Tom Dumont described how the group wanted to be able to sell products to their fans after concerts and shows,), I would replace “described how” with “said that”.
For this part (the group's then-upcoming second studio album.), I do not see a reason to keep “then-upcoming” as it is clear from the context.

I do not think you need to include the reference for each sentence as it would be clear by having only the reference at the end of paragraph, that all of its information would be supported by that one citation.

Wonderful work with the article. Once my comments are addressed, I will pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 19:09, 21 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Aoba47 - thanks so much for the extra time with this. I will get to the other one shortly. Have a good day, Carbrera (talk) 21:52, 7 February 2019 (UTC).[reply]