Talk:Spending All My Time/GA1

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Reviewer: IndianBio (talk · contribs) 07:07, 6 June 2015 (UTC)

• (stylized as "Spending all my time") --> Where? I don't see any stylization on the cover art or anywhere
• their 2008 track "Take Me, Take Me" from their debut album Game --> their 2008 track, "Take Me, Take Me", from their debut album Game
• and praised the production values and composition --> remove the word "values"
• The song became their seventh consecutive single to stall at number two in Japan. --> Japan has a number of charts, so which chart do you mean?
• which shows Perfume dancing and making dance-inspired gestures in a room --> dance-inpsired gestures? what does that even mean
• instrumentation of a synthesizer and keyboards --> instrumentation from synthesizer and keyboards
• Alex Shenmue noted “"Spending all my Time (album-mix)" brings --> Alex Shenmue noted "'Spending all my Time' brings
• Please maintain that ending quote-marks go before comma or periods
• whereas member Kashiyuka explained, ""Spending all my time" --> remove whereas and replace with ... member Kashiyuka explained, "'Spending all my time' is completely in English
• Again, what does the commercial aspects of Mirai and Magic have to do here?
• The Billboard links in the chart section should be italicized since its a journal

On hold for seven days. —Indian:BIO ^{[ ChitChat ]} 09:22, 16 June 2015 (UTC)

@IndianBio: Done. Finished all adjustments, re-arranging, grammar, etc. In regards to the song title, here is the title for the DVD cover. GirlsAlouud (talk · contribs} 04:26, 17 June 2015 (UTC)

Hi @GirlsAlouud:, I understand your point about the title, however you did not get what I was referring to. The stylization is not present in anywhere in the "article". The cover art does not display it, the reviewers don't exactly follow it adn neither the references. If it is not being displayed anywhere, how would a reader understand how it was stylized? —Indian:BIO ^{[ ChitChat ]} 05:06, 17 June 2015 (UTC)

Oh yes, I get your point now @IndianBio:. I may just removed it from the article; there's no importrance in keeping it there, because the CD only cover is the only cover displayed in the infobox. All done. GirlsAlouud (talk · contribs} 05:23, 17 June 2015 (UTC)

Many of the charts are component of the Japan Hot 100 or Oricon Singles chart. Can you list me here the importance of all of them? Like those animation and tv charts. Component charts are not supposed to be listed. —Indian:BIO ^{[ ChitChat ]} 05:28, 17 June 2015 (UTC)

The list provided are charts supplied by Billboard (Japan Hot 100) (apart from the Oricon charts). The animation/singles charts do not have much importance in being in the article so I am gladly to remove them (along with other articles that feature this trait). However, charts like the Japan Hot 100, Japan Billboard Radio Songs Chart or Japan Billboard Adult Alternative Chart (this one is apparently defunct, so no use anyway) do; they have appeared in several other references through the discography of different Japanese articles, with appropriate references. Examples like Namie Amuro have mentioned them in the notes.

RE-EDIT The Japan Adult Alternative Chart is not supportive in the list, so it has been removed. But the animation chart list was listed in the groups song "Mirai no Museum" because it was released in part of an Animated film (hence the relation to the Hot Animation Chart). But if it is not good enough, I am good to remove it. GirlsAlouud (talk · contribs} 05:45, 17 June 2015 (UTC)

I have made another edit and correct the chart names. Now I'm happy to pass this as a GA. —Indian:BIO ^{[ ChitChat ]} 05:51, 17 June 2015 (UTC)

Thank you very much! :) GirlsAlouud (talk · contribs} 05:56, 17 June 2015 (UTC)