Talk:Special Project/GA1
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Reviewer: Lemonade51 (talk · contribs) 18:59, 13 June 2012 (UTC)
Lead
- "The episode was written by Amelie Gillette and was directed by David Rogers.", replace the bolded part with It
- I suggest you reword the plot in the lead and it could do with beefing up.
Plot
- "Meanwhile Jim (John Krasinski) receives..." can merit it's own paragraph.
- "Erin expresses frustration that Andy is still with Jessica..." on the other hand does not, merge it.
Production
- "The episode introduces a six episode arc which will feature several of the office workers working on a special project for Sabre in Tallahassee, Florida", two things: first, six-episode should be hyphenated. Secondly, the tense used is confusing, as the six episodes have been aired, should it be "which featured several of the office workers..."
Reception
- "The episode originally aired" → "The episode first aired"
- "Not all reviews were positive." → "However, not all reviews were positive"
References
- Why is TV by the Numbers a 'work' in Ref 8 and a 'publisher' on Ref 9?
On hold for seven days. Lemonade51 (talk) 19:24, 13 June 2012 (UTC)
- Although I know this isn't my GA nomination, I went ahead and fixed everything.--Gen. Quon (talk) 20:12, 13 June 2012 (UTC)