Talk:Space 220 Restaurant/GA1
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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 06:47, 19 August 2022 (UTC)
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The changes are mostly copy. The Reception section has some issues that really, really need fixing—and you're just lucky enough to get someone who can catch one of them as reviewer. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 07:52, 19 August 2022 (UTC)
- 7-day hold to Kaleeb18. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 07:53, 19 August 2022 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review! ― Kaleeb18TalkCaleb 12:55, 19 August 2022 (UTC)
Copy changes
[edit]History
[edit]- "September 20, 2021" needs a MOS:DATECOMMA.
- Is there another source to replace the generally unreliable PopSugar?
Theme
[edit]- Rich Pope of Orlando Sentinel Can we get a "the" before the name of the newspaper?
- Done
Food
[edit]- Are there too many names of food items?
- How do the Space Station Supplements figure into the menu? Their nomenclature is...confusing.
Reception
[edit]- A couple of things rub me wrong in this: Josh Elliot of Narcity stated that you will, "Eat better than an astronaut and get a great view of space without ever leaving Earth!" There shouldn't be a comma there, and the use of "you" in the article sounds off. This almost sounds...too promotional. Is there a way to reword?
- "not and E ticket" typo fix
- Your local writer of TV stations articles would highly suggest that any reference to NBC2.com be scuppered for two reasons:
- Declaring, "The effect is engaging, providing just a 'taste' of what the astronauts on the International Space Station experience every day, just with better food." I think this quote is too long. "Declaring" is not a separate sentence, so this needs to be merged with the one before it; I'd tweak it to focus on the "effect is engaging" part.
- I changed the sentence
- Is Finance Buzz a reliable source?
Other items
[edit]- References are archived.
- Earwig mostly catches proper nouns as well as the quotes used in the reception section.
- Images: There is an appropriately tagged fair use logo and freely licensed image of the interior. Both need alt text.
- Done
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