Talk:South Africa women's cricket team in England in 2018/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 18:29, 12 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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" 9 – 15 June 2018" should be unspaced. Might be the template, but that needs to be addressed.
- Yeah, it's the template. I need to look at some coding in other templates to see how to make this work. I'll come back on this one later. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 09:16, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  - Okay, worked this out and fixed now. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 10:22, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Venue table could use row and col scopes.
- Yeah. Any thoughts on that? I'm not even convinced that I like the table: I added it on a whim to see if it seemed useful. I sort of think it is, and sort of think it isn't. I can't see any realistic way to make it accessible (which isn't actually a GA requirement, but I would prefer to if possible.) Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 09:16, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
And the map image needs a caption explaining what we're seeing, people unfamiliar with the geography of the UK may not even realise what they're looking at.
"their tour of England" I would reinforce the subject in this opening para, and say "their 2018 tour of England"
- Done. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 09:16, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"May: omitting" strange tense after a colon, perhaps replace with a comma.
- Done. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 09:16, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Link wicket-keeper.
- Linked. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 09:16, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"Brits was suggested" by whom?
- Added. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 09:16, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"Syd Egan's preview" who is he and why is his opinion noteworthy?
- Expanded this slightly to provide more context. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 09:16, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"14 player squad" 14-player
- Duh, done. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 09:16, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"The first match was .." I'm not sure you've explained/linked WODI in the main body (you did in the lead) so here would be a good chance to do that.
- Good idea, added. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 09:16, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"played at New Road, Worcester" could add the date here too in the prose (and for each subsequent match).
- Added. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 09:16, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"first bowling change" what style of bowling?
- Is this necessary? I don't think the article notes what style of bowling any of the players have? Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 09:16, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Suné Luus is missing a diacritic here.
"and Suné Luus inside" linked in the previous para (see point preceding).
- Nice spot for this pair. I missed the first, and the duplicate detector didn't flag it up because they were different! Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 09:16, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"be caught out by" this means different things to different people, perhaps just "caught" or "caught off the bowling of..."?
- Removed "out", how is that? (So to speak.) Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 09:16, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"two balls later" repetitive "balls", maybe deliviries.
- Changed. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 09:16, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Should link Century (cricket) in both lead and here.
- Gah, I though I'd got all the jargon! Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 09:16, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"were losing regular" regularly losing...
- Yup, changed. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 09:16, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"hit the wickets" do you mean stumps?
- They're the ones, changed. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 09:16, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"also out , stumped" remove first space before comma.
- Oops! Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 09:16, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"were unable to add much to the" did not add
- Changed. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 09:16, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Notes b and c are fragments so do not need full stops.
- Removed. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 09:16, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 4: SHOUTING.
- Changed to Title Case. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 09:16, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"2017–20 ICC Women's Championship" usage throughout should be "2017–2020 ICC Women's Championship" as MOS has changed a while back for year ranges.
- All uses in the article already matched that. Changed the navbox, but I haven't touched the category, which is beyond the purview of the article anyway. (I'll get to it, but categories are a pain...) Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 09:16, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 08:07, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: Cheers, replies above. First couple are outstanding as described. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 09:16, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I think, having added col scopes, and given the images have alt and there's now a label for the map (which I added with the scopes), it's as good as it can be for what it is, and as you say, not GA criterion in any case, so I'm good to go with this. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 11:28, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]