Talk:Sonic Colors/GA2

GA Review 2

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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk) 20:39, 20 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I've played a fair amount of Sonic (especially as a little kid...) but I haven't played this game. Taking a read through.

What's up with all the refs in the lead? The lead should summarise what is already found elsewhere. I don't really get why we need three references for the name of the game; that's perhaps going to be useful pre-release, but this game has existed for a long time.
Sonic the Hedgehog is a dablink
Why the commas after the years?
"The game is centered around the protagonist Sonic the Hedgehog and his fight against the main antagonist of the Sonic series, Dr. Eggman, who has taken an alien race hostage and is using them for his evil purposes. During the game, the camera perspective switches occasionally from third person to side-scrolling. During development, Sega explained that they were delisting sub-standard games in the Sonic series and developing new titles in order to increase the value of the brand." Choppy- three unrelated sentences
It would be good in the plot section if it was made more clear what the actual game is- presumably the bulk of the game is Sonic bouncing around multiple planets? (Also, are these the planets in the theme park?)
"As the place prepares to explode" What place?
"As the place prepares to explode, Sonic sends Tails back down the space elevator while he faces off against Dr. Eggman as he uses the Nega-Wisps for his final contraption." Long, overly complex sentence
"The contraption uses all the Wisps that Sonic has met against him, but as the machine gets weaker, the wisps are able to escape and help Sonic" So, he hadn't successfully liberated them?
"Sonic defeats Dr. Eggman and returns safely to his world, where Yacker thanks them" Sonic is not a plural
"In the DS version, they learn that the Mother Wisp had been infected by the negative energy and is transformed into the Nega-Mother Wisp, which Sonic defeats as Super Sonic." So the Wii version ends with the bidding goodbye?
"The Wii version can be played with the Wii Remote (either with or without the Nunchuk), the Classic Controller, or a GameCube controller; the DS version uses the button controls, with touchscreen control during Special Stages. During the game, the player can use the colored energy obtained from different types of Wisps as power-ups that enhance Sonic's ability to traverse the environments and explore new areas. There are a total of eight Wisps in the Wii version and six in the DS version; some Wisps are exclusive to each version." This is all unsourced. Also, I got the impression that there were many wisps? They're a pretty rare race?
"(or, once unlocked, Miis)" Once the Miis are unlocked, or once the mode that allows this is unlocked? If the ref outside the brackets is for this statement, stick it in the brackets?
"Special Rings" Why caps? "Rings" have not been explained yet.
"excluding bosses, Challenge Stages in the Egg Shuttle, and the Sonic Simulator)" Many of these have received little or no explanation
"It also features a Challenge mode in which players can play all levels continuously and upload their total score to online leaderboards." It's not clear what this means
"missions" ?
Rings or rings?
"Infinite Boost" ?
I don't really like the use of inverted commas... Why not just stick with quote marks?
"Takashi Iizuka said" Who's he?
"&" - and?
"The script for Sonic Colors was written by MadWorld and Happy Tree Friends writers, Ken Pontac & Warren Graff." I think there's more to be said about this
"The game, along with Sonic Free Riders, is also one of the first in the series to feature the new voice actors" Who are they?
"Another action figure was released by Jazwares that includes a 5-inch Sonic with two Wisps." Ref?
"who also commented" Who?
""Best Wii game", but lost to Epic Mickey, "Best DS game", and "Best Platformer"" Did it win the other two?
"Arther Gies for IGN" Link IGN?
"78/100[41] and 79/100[42] on Metacritic and 79.03%[39] and 77.07%[40] on GameRankings;" Which score is which version?
IGN is not a person- attribute the reviews to the reviewer, not the publication
"Power's"Best Graphics of 2010"." You missed a space
"resulting from the poor stage design[65]" Full stop?
How come Dimps is mentioned for the first time in the reception section?
Cite for Nintendo Power scores?

Sources

I have some concern over the use of some sources; you've used a lot of rather publication/blogs. The references need a bit of a clean- everything should ideally have a publisher. Also, date formatting should be consistent, and remember to italicise the name of periodicals

"ArchangelUK (May 27, 2010). "Sonic Colors Update – Okay AAUK, Who Is Doing It?". Sonic City Blognik. Retrieved 2 January 2011." Who is the author, and why should we care what their blog says?
"Infernal Monkey (9 August 2010). "Australian Sonic Colours release date confirmed". Retrieved 2 January 2011." Again?
Why is Kotaku.com reliable?
- WP:VG/RS came to the decision that articles made in 2010 and later are considered reliable sources, because their editorial standards were stronger and they had more independently reliable staff members. - New Age Retro Hippie (talk) (contributions) 01:40, 29 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"Pintur (May 26, 2010). "Sega annuncia Sonic Colours". Retrieved January 6, 2011." Another pseudonymous blogger?
Why is tssznews.com reliable?
Why is totalvideogames.com reliable?
"RubyEclipse", "Kellie" and "Shadzter"- yet more pseudonymous bloggers
Those publishers which are notable (CVG, Destructoid, etc) could do with wikilinks.
Is Spong.com definitely reliable? 2D-X.com?
- Spong is definitely not a reliable source. - New Age Retro Hippie (talk) (contributions) 01:40, 29 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Anoop Gantayat (August 23, 2010). "Sonic Colors Date Set". Andriasang. Retrieved January 8, 2011. Another blog
- Andriasang is considered a reliable source on WP:VG/RS, despite it having no editorial oversight (though there has been some discussion over whether single-person blog sites should be considered reliable). - New Age Retro Hippie (talk) (contributions) 01:40, 29 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Sonic Stadium reliable? Looks like a fansite...
"RawmeatCowboy (November 9, 2010). "Famitsu - review scores". GoNintendo. Retrieved January 8, 2011." Reliable?
"Jason Ross (November 16, 2010). "Sonic Colors (Wii) Review". Pixlbit. Retrieved January 8, 2011.." Reliable?

Sorry, this may all come across as a rather critical review, especially when you've been waiting so long for it. I hope you're able to deal with any problems. J Milburn (talk) 21:22, 20 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

As there has been little response, I am failing this article at this time. I strongly recommend any interested parties work on my suggestions and then renominate the article. J Milburn (talk) 21:15, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]