Talk:Social media in the 2016 United States presidential election/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kncny11 (talk · contribs) 23:00, 22 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Five months seems long enough to wait, doesn't it? Any section I mark with a Working tag means that I haven't finished combing through it yet, but feel free to start making changes as soon as they appear! Kncny11 ^(shoot) 23:00, 22 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Working on it now! Giraffer ^{(talk·contribs)} 17:16, 23 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Lede

Very little in the first paragraph is cited in the body
WL fake news
The new policies in question (end of 3rd para) should be mentioned in the body
Done - one citation added to the paragraph and another to a relevant section of the body. Giraffer ^{(talk·contribs)} 18:36, 5 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Background

Combine the first two paragraphs
Comma after "He added that"
I think something is messed up with the quotation marks in the third paragraph
"Candidates would use social media to make short statements"
Pipe 2012 election cycle to 2012 United States presidential election
End of the third paragraph needs a citation
The last paragraph belongs more in "Impact", because it discusses the aftermath

Done - the text you have said needs citations is technically original research, so I've removed it. Giraffer ^{(talk·contribs)} 17:45, 5 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Impact

This section should go just above "Post-election investigations"
WL Pew Research Center
"was seen to" → "were seen to"
"forced people" → "forced others"
Strike "as opposed to their own individual one"
"meant that an additional 97 million people were shown them." → "helped the information reach an additional 97 million people."
Done Giraffer ^{(talk·contribs)} 17:20, 23 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Donald Trump

"to focus more on media-based appearance" → "part of his strategy to emphasize media appearance over volunteers and donations"
"involved the general public" → "were from the general public, as opposed to news outlets and government officials"
"Trump has become well-documented in his frequent Twitter posts." → "Trump's unique use of social media compared to other candidates garnered critical attention."
"With social media acting as free media and publicity," cut this clause and tie it to the sentence before.
"Before the Republican National Convention where Trump was named the Republican candidate," → "Before being named as the official party candidate at the 2016 Republican National Convention"
"he would relentlessly target" → "many of his tweets directly attacked"
Delink Trump in the middle of the paragraph
"utilized Twitter frequently" → "frequently utilized Twitter"
Comma after "win the primary and general elections"
Italicize Slate and pipe to Slate (magazine)
WL WaPo
"until his personal Twitter account"
After "January 9, 2021", just say "in light of the storming of the United States Capitol."
"an act of love." → "an act of love". per MOS:LQ
""an act of love", to which Bush replied that he did. Almost immediately thereafter, the Trump campagin posted..."
"it's not a felony [...] it's an act of love"
Comma after "During this time period"
"The Great Meme War" needs a citation
"On Reddit, r/The Donald was a pro-Trump subforum (termed a subreddit on Reddit)" → "On Reddit, the subreddit r/The Donald was a pro-Trump forum" and nix the parentheses
Specify that r/The Donald got shut down, not r/HillaryClinton
Is there an underscore in r/The Donald? It's used interchangeably here
Partly done, I'm not too keen on the wording of "Trump's unique use of social media compared to other candidates garnered critical attention and with social media acting as free media and publicity, Trump harnessed Twitter as a platform to respond quickly to his opponents and tweet about his stance on various issues." (my change made per point 4) or whether the clause "alternating with footage of Bush saying the phrase." is relevant in its sentence ("Almost immediately thereafter, the Trump campaign...}}. I've implemented all the changes but would appreciate feedback on those two points. Giraffer ^{(talk·contribs)} 18:14, 23 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hillary Clinton

WL fake news
The last sentence in the first paragraph doesn't match up with what the citation says
Don't use curly quotes
Combine first two sentences of the second paragraph
Stray quotation mark after "criticize the growing tax rate"
The last sentence says they used popular social media trends, but doesn't explain how
post "exclusively positive content" of what?
WL Democratic National Convention
"..." → "[...]"
When did Clinton start using Snapchat?
Expand on the Cedar Rapids Vine
Done. I removed the "began" part for Clinton's Snapchat because I couldn't find a source for when she created her account. Giraffer ^{(talk·contribs)} 18:50, 23 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Ted Cruz

Add Guardian citation at the end of the sentence with the direct quote
"viral video of a ~~unusually awkward~~ failed attempt"
"which was edited to emphasize his awkwardness in reality." → "edited to draw attention towards Cruz's awkwardness"
The article about the Zodiac meme should probably be linked as a "See also"
That way, "Zodiac Killer" can be linked separately
Swap out parentheses for a comma in the last sentence
Done Giraffer ^{(talk·contribs)} 19:02, 23 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Bernie Sanders

"Sander's" → "Sanders'"
"ads ~~had~~ attracted"
Merge first two sentences ("young voters and bolstered his")
Dollar sign before 230 million
"more emotional and plain" than who or what?
That statement also needs a source
"In one of his posts"
Would prefer a secondary source on number of retweets compared to Clinton
"widely acknowledged" by who?
"Sanders supporters who succeeded in closing down a planned Trump rally in Chicago in March 2016 organized their efforts via Facebook." → "Sanders supporters succeeded in closing down a planned Trump rally in Chicago in March 2016 did so through Facebook organizing efforts."
"one of the several online groups supporting the candidate" (limit repetition)
Memes were used as the primary means of starting conversational topics in groups such as "Bernie Sanders' Dank Meme Stash" and "Bernie Sanders is my HERO", which were primarily devoted to debating & educating, and praising Bernie whilst pointing out flaws in rival candidates Ted Cruz, Donald Trump, and Hillary Clinton in comical ways. This sentence needs a citation and a rewrite for clarity and neutrality
Delink Internet meme
The refbomb around the name of the "Bernie or Hillary?" and "Bernie vs. Hillary" meme names is a little extreme. I think all you need is the NPR source that's used for both
The Buzzfeed source says nothing about one candidate being "lively" and the other "offbeat"
Many of the sources you pulled about the meme mention a debate around gender stereotypes, which are never mentioned in the Wiki article
Done, although I removed most of the first paragraph and merged some of it into the second. Giraffer ^{(talk·contribs)} 18:42, 25 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Other candidates

"The humorous Balanced Rebellion video in which "Dead Abe Lincoln endorses Johnson has been"" → "The humorous "Balanced Rebellion" video, in which "Dead Abe Lincoln" endorses Johnson, was"
Mention that it received over 18 million views and 420k shares within 2 weeks
Reference [58] is dead with no archive
Introduce Johnson as the former governor of New Mexico right away, rather than in the third sentence
WL New Mexico
Add another sentence describing why the heart attack video made headlines
Pipe heart attack to Myocardial infarction
Pipe "third party candidate" to Third party (United States)
Mention that his Google searches increased after Cruz dropped out after the sentence saying he tried to appeal to dissatisfied Ds and Rs
Comma after "proved to be somewhat effective"
Introduce who Jill Stein is
WL Hofstra University
"weren't only faced with" → "were faced with more than" per MOS:N'T
Comma before "and gained 27,000 new followers"
"followed Gary Johnson in attempting to sway"
The Stein section is very choppy as is, with a lot of word repetition between sentences

Done, with Stein's section reworded. Giraffer ^{(talk·contribs)} 16:36, 28 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Post-election investigations

WL Cambridge Analytica in the body
Comma after "In both instances"
WL whistleblower
"information collected was subsequently used to build data profiles"
"Though" → "Although"
Reference [70] is incomplete (lacks publisher/work and publication date)
WL Mark Zuckerburg
Medium is not a reliable source, as anyone can publish there
Remove comma after "Internet Research Agency"
"Repost" is used both with and without a hyphen. No preference for either, just maintain consistency
Capitalize Special Counsel
Remove comma after "integrity of the election"

Done Giraffer ^{(talk·contribs)} 21:31, 28 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

References

Please normalize the date format across the references.
[1] is missing a publication date
In [6] and [8], Wall Street Journal should be the work and not the publisher
Same with The Hill in [7] and The Guardian in [9]
In [14], [39], and [55], replace "work=NPR.org" with "publisher=NPR"
[23] (Boston Globe) should be marked with "|url-access=subscription"
"Daily" should be capitalized in [28]'s The Daily Pakistan
NYT citations [32], [42], [76], and [77] should be marked with "|url-access=limited"
Remove Motherboard from [33], as everything is now just under the Vice domain
USA Today should be the work and not the publisher in [40]
Mark [57] with "|url-access=subscription"
[69], [72], and [74] should all be The Washington Post

Partly done. Because of the other work I did, the numbers for the refs have changed. I think I got all of it but I'm not sure if I missed something. Giraffer ^{(talk·contribs)} 11:41, 30 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

General comments

Frankly, I'm impressed with the stability given the topic.
Images are relevant and available for use.
Copyvio score looks good, highest results are from direct quotes

Final comments and verdict

Some prose to work on and areas to expand on. Most worried about the neutrality, which was an inevitability considering the... volatility of this particular election cycle. I did the best I could to suggest alternatives. Don't be afraid to reach out if you need anything. In the meantime, I'm putting this article On hold. Kncny11 ^(shoot) 00:03, 23 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Kncny11, thanks for the speedy review! I've done maybe about a third of the total changes, and I'm hoping to finish them all by the end of the week. Giraffer ^{(talk·contribs)} 19:11, 23 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Kncny11, it's been a week and I've made the vast majority of the changes, I've just got to work on the lead and background and do a final check to make sure I haven't missed anything. I'm aiming to do this today or tomorrow. Thanks for your patience, Giraffer ^{(talk·contribs)} 11:48, 30 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry for the delay, I'm done. Giraffer ^{(talk·contribs)} 18:36, 5 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Apologies for my own delay this time! Right around springtime, I get these intense pressure headaches right in the center of my head due to allergies and pressure/temp changes, but I appear to have fought them off. Excellent work on this article! I'm going to give it a pass. :) Kncny11 ^(shoot) 14:58, 7 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Kncny11, sorry to hear about the headaches. Thank you very much for the pass! Giraffer ^{(talk·contribs)} 18:03, 7 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]