Talk:Sneak King/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: TheQ Editor (talk · contribs) 23:44, 7 January 2015 (UTC)

This review will be up soon. Thanks,  ΤheQ Editor  ^Talk? 23:44, 7 January 2015 (UTC)

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

   see lede comments below

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. Has an appropriate reference section:

   B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

   Please add images on the gameplay if possible  ΤheQ Editor  ^Talk? 22:07, 15 January 2015 (UTC)

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

   On hold for 7 days for concerns to be addressed.  ΤheQ Editor  ^Talk? 22:07, 15 January 2015 (UTC)

Well-Written

• "the mascot for Burger King, in a" take off the comma.
• "Players takes control of" - "Players take control of"
• Gameplay states that there are two modes, while in the infobox there is only one.
• Perhaps link to non-player characters
• "A person with a burger" - this part is confusing to the reader. Please use "NPC" for consistency
• Quotes need to be exactly as it is. "around them. 'They" should be "around them.'They"

References

• FN 2 - the date should be October 2 2006
• What's the difference between FN 1 and FN 9. Are they citing the same thing?

Broad in coverage

• Sorry if this is not specific enough. But can you add information from this book?

Listed fixes done, and yes, the manual reference was duplicated. The Changing the Game: How Video Games Are Transforming the Future of Business is not something I have full access to, but it largely duplicates the article in Game Developer. It pulls the same material in a very similar fashion with little added commentary. Yes, I could find a way to add it to the reflist - but I do not see much value in that source. Then again - I cannot see page 69 or 70. However, if you disagree with me, I will definitely try to work it in. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 22:45, 15 January 2015 (UTC)

@ChrisGualtieri: The infobox still states that there is only one game mode.  ΤheQ Editor  ^Talk? 17:06, 16 January 2015 (UTC)

Mode does not refer to sand-box, challenge or other modes - it is a reference to single player or multiplayer. Template:Infobox video game states: "Modes - Playing modes offered by the game. Currently, the only accepted values are single-player, multiplayer, or both." Sorry for not addressing it in my first response @TheQ Editor:. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 05:26, 18 January 2015 (UTC)

@ChrisGualtieri: Oops, didn't check the documentation. Passing for GA.