Talk:Smells Like Nirvana/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Curly Turkey (talk · contribs) 04:53, 12 November 2012 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

• ""Smells Like Nirvana" was met with critical praise and helped to re-energize Yankovic's career, and Cobain considered the parody as a sign that they had "made it" as a band."

  Split this in two: "...career. Cobain considered..."

• "The song's video was later nominated"

  "later" is superfluous. Ditch it.

• "another parody of a Michael Jackson song which had proven successful twice before"
  1. "another" with "before" is redundant
  2. without a comma after "which", it would seem to imply that Yankovic would re-parody a song he'd already done

  better: "a parody of a Michael Jackson song, which had proven successful twice before"

  or: "a parody of a Michael Jackson song, an appraoch [strategy, whatever] which had proven successful twice before"

• "("Eat It" and "Fat")"

  I'd kick these out of the parentheses: "with "Eat It" and "Fat""

• "Cobain agreed, though initially, he inquired if"

  Ditch the second comma

• "drums as Dave Grohl, and all three wear clothing"

  Run-on sentence. Split after "Grohl".

• "The charted on several Billboard charts"

  The what? Single? Album?

• "most successful single since his 1984 single "Eat It""

  Reduncy. Try something like "most successful single since "Eat It" in 1984".

• "Yankovic's largest comeback in his career"

  better: "the largest comeback in Yankovic's career"

• "The song was well-received by the media at the time."

  "at the time" is redundant.

• "Nirvana itself was also very pleased"

  "very" is unnecessary.

• "Nirvana was initially asked to perform, but they decline."

  Do they habitually decline? ==> "declined"

• "a similar looking shirt"

  ==> "similar-looking", or better, just "similar"

• "Yankovic worried how the crowds in Seattle, where Nirvana emerged from, would react to the parody."
• better: Yankovic worried how the crowds would react (to the parody in Seattle), where Nirvana emerged from [came from, originated].

• You use an awful lot of semicolons that don't really serve any purpose. I'd at least cut down, but to be honest, I don't think a single one of them is necessary (most of them are outright incorrect).

1. B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   I was surprised that its charting success was given for the UK and Australia, but not Canada. I seem to remember that Yankovic was particularly popular in Canada, even more than in the States. His only double-platinum record was earned in Canada. You might want to check that out.

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   It would be a good idea to put the Fair Use Rationale of File:Smells Like Nirvana (Sample).ogg into a

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

I believe I've addressed all the issues. Thank you for the review.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:50, 13 November 2012 (UTC)

I believe you have as well, and am passing the article. CüRlyTüRkey^Talk_Contribs 08:09, 13 November 2012 (UTC)