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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 23:52, 3 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I will be reviewing this article. Aaron You Da One 23:52, 3 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Infobox

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  • Only one point, Pop should come before R&B and P comes before R.  Done

Lead

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  • Musically, "Slow Down Baby" is an R&B and pop song with funk, hip hop and soul elements and backed by horns and pianos. → Bit of a mouthful, change to: "Musically, "Slow Down Baby" is a Pop and R&B song, and incorporates elements of funk, hip hop and soul genres. Instrumentation consists of horns and and a piano.  Done
  • The song received generally positive reviews from music critics → The song garnered positive reviews from music critics  Done
  • many of whom named it one of the album's standouts. → many of whom cited it as a standout track on Back to Basics.  Done
  • Its blend of old and modern R&B and Aguilera's vocals also received critical praise. → Critics also praised its blend of old and modern R&B influences, as well as Aguilera's vocal performance.  Done
  • The single was exclusively → The song was released only  Done
  • Put the year in brackets after the tour.  Done
  • The song received no direct promotion and managed to peak at number 21 on the Australian Singles Chart. → "Slow Down Baby" peaked at number 21 on the Australian Singles Chart, although it did not receive any promotion in that country.  Done

Background

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  • two distinct discs. → Remove "distinct".  Done
  • more beat-driven producers → What does this mean? All songs have beats.
Added quotations marks, as it was what Christina said. Pancake (talk) 12:56, 5 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • and used plenty of samples in the production → Poor phrasing.  Done
  • , while the second disc consists solely of collaborations with producer Linda Perry. → . The second disc...  Done
  • Aguilera sent a letter to different producers → Shouldn't it be letters ?  Done
  • and Ronson completed the production with assistance by Aguilera. → Why is she not in the info box as a producer?  Done
  • "someone like" → Why is this quoted?  Done
  • while Angry played the claviola, organ → Include these two in the Lead and composition, as you currently do not.  Done

Composition

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  • Pop before R&B  Done
  • No other issues :)

Critical reception

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  • Full of quotes. Paraphrase quite a few of them. Try and follow a "quote - paraphrase quote - quote" perhaps? Just an idea.
Haha don't know if it's enough, but I tried. Pancake (talk) 12:56, 5 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Year in brackets for the name of the tour in the picture.  Done

Chart performance

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  • exclusively → Remove  Done
  • before falling off. → Superflueous, remove.  Done

Live performances

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  • and the older singles → and other songs, including  Done
  • The performance was preceded by newspapers headlines such as, "Christina goes from 'dirrty' to demure" and "Christina cleans up her act", that flashed across the screen. → Not sure what you mean by this? So before she came on stage, headlines were flashed on a screen?
Yes. Pancake (talk) 12:56, 5 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Could you reword it to say that then? Aaron You Da One
Done I guess. Pancake (talk) 13:16, 5 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • sported → Use a different word.  Done

Formats and track listing

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  • No issues.

Credits and personnel

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  • No issues.

Charts

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  • No issues.

Other

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References

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  • FN26: Accessdate?
Accessdates don't show if there's no URL. Pancake (talk) 12:56, 5 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • FN28: Should be [[Apple Inc.|Apple]]  Done

Summary

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I liked reading this article, I might a listen to this song. Not too many issues to address, placing on hold for 7 days. Aaron You Da One 16:16, 4 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

It's a pretty nice song! I had actually never heard it before I decided to expand its article :p Pancake (talk) 13:01, 5 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I will have a listen. Passing :) Aaron You Da One 13:40, 5 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]