Talk:Sleeping with the One I Love/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 18:07, 12 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Probably next week... Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:07, 12 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you, and take as much time as you need for this. Aoba47 (talk) 23:50, 12 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

May 26, 2016, as the album's second single → remove comma
album's second single. It is written and produced → album's second single, written and produced (To avoid repetition)
the lyrics revolve around → its lyrics...
Commentators compared "Sleeping With The One I Love" → song title is written wrong here
responded positively to "Sleeping With The One I Love" → same as above
It was Fantasia 10th top-ten → This marked Fantasia's tenth top-ten
top-twenty singles → top 20 singles

Infobox

ALT > A black-and-white image of a woman in a low-cut dress is leaning against a window. The artist's name and the single's title are also included on the image. → ...image of a woman in a low-cut dress who is leaning...

Background and recording

"Sleeping With The One I Love" was written and produced → ...the...
and Steve Genewick did the → while S... handled the
Great job with the section!

Composition and lyrics

Link "DirectLyrics" to SpinMedia + correct name is "Direct Lyrics"
"Sleeping With The One I Love" is composed → title
Elias Leight of Vogue felt that "Sleeping With The One I Love" → same as above
"Sleeping With The One I Love" revolve around Fantasia → title + "revolves"
Elle Breezy questioned if the song's → say just "Breezy" as yo have mentioned her before
Fantasia explained that the single → use "the singer" here for alternation
Fantasia compared "Sleeping With The One I Love" → title
"Sleeping With The One I Love" was "a modern sister track" → same as above

Release

Flawless ;)

Reception

"Sleeping With The One I Love" received positive → title
Kevin Apaza praised the single → just "Apaza" as you have mentioned him before
Elle Breezy felt that the single → same as above
Matthew Scott Donnelly suggested the song → use "the track" for alternation
Jay Cridlin listed "Sleeping With The One I Love" → title
"Sleeping With The One I Love" debuted at → title
It was Fantasia 10th top-ten → This marked Fantasia's tenth top-ten
two top-twenty → two top 20
There are too many paragraphs out there; connect the last one with the second one

Each paragraph covers separate topics so combining them together would not work so I disagree with this comment/suggestion. Aoba47 (talk) 23:47, 17 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Music video and live performances

You can sum up the section's title to "Music video and promotion"
The video received positive reviews → say "It" here for alternation
Elle Breezy called the video → just "Breezy"
(the first in a series of live concerts on the cable channel) → no brackets needed
She performed it alongside "It's a Man's Man's Man's World". → connect this with the first sentence: Fantasia performed "Sleeping with the One I Love" — along with "It's..." — during a
Year of Fantasia & Anthony Hamilton: Live in Concert in brackets

Track listings

Remove the "s" from the title, as it's only one listing

Credits and personnel

Unlink "liner notes"
Remove ", 19 Recordings, RCA"

Charts

Flawless ;)

Release history

Fixed table by myself

Other stuff

Copy-violation

40.8% is slightly too much. Take a look at the top source and remove some content

References

As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article

Outcome

Great work with the article, like the other ones I reviewed from you I put this On hold for 7 days. Good luck with editing and best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:37, 17 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Aoba47: I don't want this to sound odd, but would you have time to review Party Never Ends? It is an Inna album and would be the last article in the respective topic. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:51, 17 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Cartoon network freak: Thank you for your review. I have addressed all of your comments above. I will do a review for your nomination for Party Never Ends soon. Let me know if there is anything else that can be done with this article. Thank you again. Aoba47 (talk) 23:47, 17 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Gladly passing this! Congrats, Cartoon network freak (talk) 04:43, 18 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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