Talk:Lowthian Bell/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: James086 (talk · contribs) 11:59, 6 February 2013 (UTC)

• The centered quote in the lead section is weird, I think it should be a normal in-line quotation. The MOS says it should be 40 or more words for a blockquote and that one breaks up the text too early on. Wikipedia:Blockquote#Block quotations

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• I understand by reading further in the article that the Forth Bridge is the company, but it's not clear in the lead, I think just the addition of the word "company" would clarify it for first-time readers.

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• Again the length of the centered quote is too short regarding the wooden rails in the Industry section.

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• This sentence is hard to read, I think it should be restructured: "In 1901, after a long period of difficulty for heavy industry including mining, steel and shipbuilding, with, he feared, worse to come as manufacturing grew in Germany, America and Japan, he made a decisive move, at age 85, to guard the family's wealth."
  • Perhaps "In 1901, at age 85, after a long period of difficulty for heavy industry and with fears of worse to come as manufacturing grew in Germany, America and Japan, he made a decisive move to guard the family's wealth."

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• In "Family life" it's not clear who Georgina Howell is. "According to his granddaughter's biographer Georgina Howell..." would fix this

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• Should William Morris have an apostrophe to imply possession of the "Double Bough" wallpaper?

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• I also made two minor changes diff

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The article looks really good, it's certainly an interesting read. On hold until these have been looked at. James086^Talk 11:59, 6 February 2013 (UTC) Thank you. All comments to date --- done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:55, 6 February 2013 (UTC)

Well that was fast! I should encourage you to review another article but it would be almost hypocritical of me when you have reviewed 20 times as many articles as myself! Excellent work. James086^Talk 13:03, 6 February 2013 (UTC)

Thankyou for the review, it was quick of you too. Of course I'll review another article, time I did. Chiswick Chap (talk) 13:14, 6 February 2013 (UTC)