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Reviewer: Keilana (talk · contribs) 03:39, 3 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Hi! Sorry this took me so long, but I've been sick for a few days. I've organized my first comments by section for your ease of use and will finish as I have time over the next couple days. I've also watchlisted this page, so I'll notice any comments you make here. Nice work! Keilana|Parlez ici 03:39, 3 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

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Background and writing

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  • "she was advised by her A&R to fly to Sweden to meet and collaborate with Martin and Dr. Luke." could do with more explanation.
The explanation succeeds the aforementioned statement. My December (talk)
I'm still a little confused, sorry... Keilana|Parlez ici 20:34, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
 Done My December (talk) 07:35, 19 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Can you rejig "Clarkson told MTV about the essence of the song, saying "It's like that relationship that you've been in and you thought it was going well and then all of a sudden you're like, 'Oh, wow, no it's not, I guess,' 'cause you want to break up and you're with someone else [...] Everybody goes through that ... it doesn't matter if you're a girl or a guy, and that's always crap.""?  Done My December (talk) 08:50, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Composition

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  • You wikilink Max Martin and Dr. Luke a few too many times in the article.  Done My December (talk) 07:35, 19 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "According to the sheet music published at Musicnotes.com by Universal Music Publishing Group," you don't really need this; I think it's a perfectly reliable source because Universal published it. So you can just leave that in the citation.  Done My December (talk) 07:35, 19 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "with a moderate beat rate" - I fixed this, but just for future use, the rate of beats in a piece of music is called a tempo.
Duly noted, thanks a lot!  Done My December (talk) 07:35, 19 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "which infuses alternative-rock’s soft/loud dichotomy appropriately" could do with a rewrite for clarity.  Done My December (talk) 07:35, 19 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • When asked whether she was a bipolar asthmatic, Clarkson responded that ""Hazel Eyes" is about the dipstick who completely screwed up and now is unhappy and you're happy. And then you're just shouting praises at the fact that he's miserable in "Since U Been Gone."" has confusing punctuation - I'm not really sure what's a quote and what's not. For "quotes-within-a-quote", use single quotation marks; that will help.  Done My December (talk) 07:35, 19 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Critical reception

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Awards and recognition

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Chart performance

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  • Some of the citations in this section were inconsistent. Go through and make sure all the dates are in the correct format, the cite templates have their ducks in order, etc.  Done My December (talk) 12:47, 26 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Music video

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  • The language around the quotes in the first section needs rewriting; I didn't do it in my copyedit for fear of misrepresenting the quotes.  Done My December (talk) 12:47, 26 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Is there a secondary source for the music video synopsis? That would be nice.
I tried looking for some but I only found one from MTV.  Done My December (talk) 12:47, 26 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • I did a pretty thorough rewrite of the synopsis because it was written a bit too casually for an encyclopedia, but I'd appreciate it if you checked it over.  Done My December (talk) 12:47, 26 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • What was the other award it got nominated for at the VMAs?  Done My December (talk) 12:47, 26 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Did MusicOMH say anything about the video? That would be a nice counterbalance to the critical quote from NPR.
MusicOMH only listed video in the list without any accompanying remarks.  Done My December (talk) 12:47, 26 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Live performances

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Cover versions and samples

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  • "Dave Donelly of Sputnikmusic praised Walker's cover for sticking closely to the original version. He also remarked that Walker's interpretation of the original song was unique." is confusing.  Done My December (talk) 22:18, 4 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'm not sure the Robyn and Keri Hilson covers are particularly notable, were they reviewed or anything in an external, reliable source?  Done My December (talk) 22:18, 4 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]