Talk:Sian Breckin/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lemonade51 (talk · contribs) 21:58, 16 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Shall review this one.

General

A few dead links.
One dab link which needs addressing.
No problems with images either, as none are used.
Newspaper sources need locations added. For publications where the location is given, I would advise you to remove them (ie: Cleveland Scene Weekly) for reasons obvious.
Domains are not the same as publishers.

Lead

"From 1993 to 1999, Breckin attended classes at the Roundhay School, and received GCE Advanced Level qualification in the field of drama.", although this is the qualification's correct title, I would suggest you use its colloquial name, amongst students, teachers and publication style guides in Britain – the A-Level. So the sentence would become '...recieved an A-Level in drama'.
"Breckin had a recurring role as Deena Hardman on the 2012 television series Hollyoaks.", Hollyoaks is a recurring soap drama in Britain. How the sentence is worded may give the impression that it was a one-off series, first shown in 2012. You need to reword this, to state Breckin appeared in Hollyoaks in 2012.

Career

Sky News is not italicised.
Is it "Breckin guest-starred opposite series regular" "Breckin guest starred on the television drama..." -- hyphenated or not?

Shall pass once comments have been addressed. On hold until then. Lemonade51 (talk) 21:58, 16 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks very much for the review, will get to addressing all above comments shortly, and post back here, — Cirt (talk) 02:47, 17 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Responses to GA Review

Trimmed or replaced the dead links.
Fixed the dab link.
Addressed this, checked to make sure cites satisfy WP:V and made sure there was no need for obvious and therefore redundant location info.
Removed domain names from publisher fields.
Changed sentence to " A-Level in drama".
Removed the hyphen in this case.
Thanks very much for these helpful recommendations, — Cirt (talk) 18:00, 19 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Happy to pass, nice work. Lemonade51 (talk) 22:32, 19 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks very much! — Cirt (talk) 02:52, 20 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]