Talk:Shunten/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Generalissima (talk · contribs) 21:52, 10 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: AirshipJungleman29 (talk · contribs) 18:21, 21 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

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Thought I recognised the name, he's the legendary cousin of the alleged Genghis Khan! Funny old world.

"The official histories of the Ryukyu Kingdom" might want to specify that they ruled/lived on Okinawa.
- Fixed. - G
"against Riyū, who had usurped" was Riyū a god too?
- One of the sources called Shunten the first human ruler, and now I realized it was probably not something they thought about much. Clarified that lol. - G
"He gained the recognition" should the "the" be there?
- Fixed. - G
"as the overlord of Okinawa chieftans in 1187" unless you're paying attention to the dates, this sounds like a different event to the revolt against Riyū.
- Fixed. - G
"when his grandson Gihon disappeared into the forests and was succeed by his regent Eiso" a) typo b) possibly the forest detail is unnecessary?
- Fair point. - G
"Invasion of Ryukyu" is the capitalised "i" needed?
- Fixed. - G
If he unified Okinawa, maybe say "the overlord of all Okinawa chieftains" in the first lead paragraph?
- Good idea. - G
"The Chūzan Seikan (lit. Reflections on Chūzan)" is this one of the histories?
- Yes, clarified. - G
"Japanese suiden, meaning "flooded paddy"" ... is that meant to mean something?
- I don't get if Zenchū was making a bigger point there, no. I can remove it if need be.

Looked at Smits 2019 and Ito 2011:

I can't find "Okinawa would not be unified until the 15th century" in Smits p.153.
- Oops, I think I forgot a 2024 cite there. Added. - G
Ito 2011 p. 89 fn.29 seems to indicate that Taira Shidehara's book was published in 1899.
- Added. - G
details about Kato Sango's 1906 critique are found around p.92.