Talk:Shrewsbury Drapers Company/GA1

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 21:54, 3 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I should finish this tomorrow. JAGUAR 21:54, 3 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Initial comments

"The Shrewsbury Drapers Company was a trade organization" - organisation

Fixed. Aymatth2 (talk) 00:46, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"founded in 1462 in the town of Shrewsbury, Shropshire" - link Shropshire

Maybe this is over-linking. I generally follow the principle that when a word or phrase is preceded or followed by others that describe it, only link the main topic. So "Shrewsbury" is linked and "Shropshire" is mentioned. I wrote on that at User:Aymatth2/Opinions#Links years ago. Not a big deal, obviously. Aymatth2 (talk) 00:46, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I agree, and I used to take a similar approach with de-linking the names of countries. It should be fine in this case JAGUAR 19:20, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"and became irrelevant when the Industrial Revolution made trade guilds obsolete" - link Industrial Revolution

Fixed. Aymatth2 (talk) 00:46, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"The Mercers' Company remained the richest and strongest trade organization" - organisation (British English)

Fixed. I should say in my ~~defense~~ defence that I was born in England but for many years worked for firms that used American spelling as the standard. Aymatth2 (talk) 00:46, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"In 1576 the Company built a new Drapers Hall in St Mary‟s Place" - two apostrophes here

Fixed. Aymatth2 (talk) 00:46, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"43% of the 203 Freemen admitted to the company between 1608 and 1657" - 'company' is uncapitalised here, whereas it's capitalised everywhere else

Fixed. Aymatth2 (talk) 00:46, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"In 1621 the drapers "agreed to buy no more cloth in Oswestry." John Davies" - full stop after quote (minor)

Fixed. Aymatth2 (talk) 00:46, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"a clothier from Merioneth had to travel twenty miles further each way" - would be nice to have this converted to metric too, such as 20 miles (32 km), but I'll leave that up to you

Fixed. No question about that. Aymatth2 (talk) 00:46, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"and as a consequence the company was not given royal support" - not sure if it needs to be capitalised here, but I noticed it nevertheless

Fixed. It could be either way, but I think better capitalized. Aymatth2 (talk) 00:46, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

No dead links

This is an excellent article. I could find little to mention, but once all of the above are out of the way then this will have no problem passing. It is well written, comprehensive and well researched. JAGUAR 20:37, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for addressing them! I've gone through the article and am happy to conclude that it meets the criteria. It is well researched, well written and well referenced.

JAGUAR 19:20, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]