Talk:Shinrei Jusatsushi Tarōmaru/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cognissonance (talk · contribs) 21:43, 3 July 2018 (UTC)

I love reviewing the small ones. Cognissonance (talk) 21:43, 3 July 2018 (UTC)

Lead

• Note [a] needs to be confirmed by sources.
  • Done

Gameplay

• albeit means "though", which doesn't fit the sentence. I suggest "outside of".
  • Done
• Link "reticle" to Reticle.
  • Done
• hypnotize certain types enemies Grammar: "hypnotize certain types of enemies".
  • Done

Reception and legacy

• They found the gameplay to be deceivingly deep and intense Is "deceivingly" a quote? If so, put quotes between the word. If not, it reads very much like WP:POV.
  • Not a quote, but they said it was more deep and intense than it seemed to them at first glance. I replaced "deceivingly" with "surprisingly".
• They found the auto lock-on function and scarcity of recovery items made it slightly difficult "found" in this sentence reads like it means "discovered". Perhaps clarify with "thought that".
  • Done

External links

• MobyGames is unreliable, per WP:VG/RS.
  • I removed it since it doesn't really add value. But for the record, external links do not need to be reliable WP:ELMAYBE.

Overall

It has few flaws, but one of which is: why no plot section? Cognissonance (talk) 23:43, 3 July 2018 (UTC)

@Cognissonance: No plot section for two reasons. One, I don't know what it is. I don't own the game and no scans of the manual online. Two, according to MOS:VG, the "plot coverage should be proportional to the plot's importance in the game, as determined by its weight in the article's source material." In the case of this game, the sources don't go any further into the story than what's written here in the gameplay section. I'm sure there's more lore written in the game manual, but unless sources cover it, it'd be undue weight. WP:VGORDER suggests lumping plot with gameplay if it isn't too complex, which is what I did here. TarkusAB^talk 18:06, 4 July 2018 (UTC)

I'm satisfied with the changes. Passed. Cognissonance (talk) 19:13, 4 July 2018 (UTC)