Talk:Shepton Mallet/GA1

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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 10:46, 20 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I'll start a readthrough now and post queries below. Feel free to revert any changes to meaning I inadvertently make - Casliber (talk · contribs) 10:46, 20 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

~~The lead is a bit choppy and jumps around a bit. It should be coalesced into 2-3 longer paras (easier on the eyes). I might try this after reading through.~~

Lead consolidated into three paras. Dmvward (talk) 13:20, 25 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

...~~with substantial amounts of Neolithic flint being found, as well as some pottery from the later Neolithic period.~~ ~~- this reads oddly. Should it be an early and then later neolithic? Do the sources specify sub-ages within the neolithic?~~

This is almost a direct quote from the source material (Gathercole, page 5) which says "Neolithic settlement: Substantial amounts of neolithic flint, and a few pieces of late neolithic pottery, have been recovered from excavations in the Roman settlement area and at Cannard’s Grave." So doesn't really help to clarify, I'm afraid. Dmvward (talk) 11:48, 20 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Bother, still late neolithic makes more sense than later....Casliber (talk · contribs) 12:02, 20 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I've changed this to late noelithic.— Rod ^talk 14:55, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

~~Need a word or two explaining Bowlish - suburb/hamlet on north/east/whatever side of town (?)~~

I've added a sentence.— Rod ^talk 14:55, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

An explanation of population growth between 1951 and 2001 would be nice, in last para of 18th to 20th centuries

Unable to find a simple explanation at the moment, but will keep an eye out. Dmvward (talk) 13:20, 25 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, nevermind then. Casliber (talk · contribs) 19:56, 25 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Is it fair to say it is generally tory-leaning?

Difficult to say that definitively. The election of a conservative MP will have been substantially due to [[Wells] being in the same constituency. Dmvward (talk) 13:20, 25 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, nevermind then. Casliber (talk · contribs) 19:56, 25 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Within Shepton Mallet there are several distinct areas - any other descriptors or adjectives or notes that describe any individual character of these places would be a bonus.

Have added a new sub-section describing the various parts of the town. Let me know if you think I've over-done it! Dmvward (talk) 14:05, 23 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Nice. I like it. well done. Casliber (talk · contribs) 19:50, 23 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

~~In the Geography section - is there any wilderness nearby (or is it all farms)?~~

I've added the Sites of Special Scientific Interest.— Rod ^talk 15:09, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

And I've added some additional info on local countryside, and the river, and rearranged a little. Dmvward (talk) 14:05, 23 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Again - nice. I like it. well done. Casliber (talk · contribs) 19:50, 23 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Shepton Mallet is home to three international drinks producers. - sounds odd - beverage producers?

Changed to "international alcoholic drinks producers". Dmvward (talk) 13:20, 25 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Shepton Mallet is home to three international drinks producers. - needs a cite I think. In fact, the para that it is in needs a rewrite. I will have a read of ref 72 anon. (slow to load at the moment and I have to run again in a moment...)

References added. Dmvward (talk) 13:20, 25 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

~~Walter Buckland~~ ~~- a one or two-word adjective or occupation here ("merchant"? "nobleman"?)~~

I've checked the Bush reference given & no further information is given, but there are online references to a plaque to him & his wife Agnes on the market cross.— Rod ^talk 15:32, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

None of the four local history books I am using says what his occupation or civic standing was, I'm afraid. Dmvward (talk) 14:05, 23 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Never mind then. You tried :) Casliber (talk · contribs) 19:41, 23 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

~~In the Culture section - is there a local radio station?~~

~~Overall, nearly there~~. My interest was piqued as my genealogical research led me here....Casliber (talk · contribs) 01:31, 21 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the comments - I will work through them (and hopefully add in some more stuff I've come across) in the next couple of days. But I can answer the last question straight away - no local radio station (if you mean one for Shepton specifically). Dmvward (talk) 12:30, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Yeah, that's what I meant. cheers, Casliber (talk · contribs) 12:49, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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.....aaaaaaaaaaaannd that's a wrap folks :) Casliber (talk · contribs) 19:56, 25 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your helpful and fair review & especially to Dmvward for the majority of the edits - together you have definitely improved the article.— Rod ^talk 20:23, 25 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]