Talk:Shelter (Finneas song)/GA2
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:43, 20 October 2020 (UTC)
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Nice to see you so active again! I will wipe this review out very soon...
Infobox and lead
[edit]- Finneas → Finneas O'Connell under songwriters
- "It was released by" → "The song was released by"
- Target single to Single (music)
- "He wrote the song" → "Afterwards, he wrote the song"
- Mention in this same para info about the song's lyrics
- "A music video for the track was" → "A music video for "Shelter" was" with the wikilink
- "shove him and toss him roughly." → "shove and toss him roughly."
- "throughout October 2019," → "throughout October 2019 to support Blood Harmony,"
- "his tour including performances of the track." → "the tour including performances of the song."
Background and composition
[edit]- "written back in 2016." → "written back in 2016 by Finneas."
- "Finneas had heard that" → "He had heard that"
- "Avicii, was looking for" → "Avicii was looking for"
- "Finneas wrote the track" → "Following on from this, Finneas wrote the track"
- Only [2] needs to be at the end of the "confess" sentence since the other sources are irrelevant
- "as the third single on" → "as the third single from" with the target
- Remove wikilink on Blood Harmony
- "and streaming through his record label" → "and streaming, through his record label" with the wikilink
- The pop track sentence should start the second para
- "described the track as" → "described "Shelter" as"
- ""Shelter" features" → "The track features"
- Target Latin to Latin music
- "gospel choir effect[s] during the chorus," → "gospel choir effect[s] that appear during the chorus," with the targets
- "reverb’d handclaps, bluesy vocal embellishment" → "reverb'd handclaps, bluesy vocal embellishment," with the target and wikilink
- Target bridge to Bridge (music)
- "And further comments the song is" → "He further commented that the track is"
- Wikilink acoustic guitar
- "melody" that is very" → "melody", which is very"
- Add release year of "Shape of You" in brackets
- "is set at a dance tempo." → "is set in a dance tempo." with the wikilink
- Merge the final para with this one in the new order
- "is about a love for a girl that brings" → "is about a lover that brings"
- ""They call us" → "He represents the trouble with the lyrics, "They call us"
- "for the track only gets more urgent as it continues." → "of the track becomes more urgent as it continues:"
Critical reception
[edit]- "received mainly positive reviews" → "was met with mainly positive reviews"
- "noted that Shelter was" → "noted that "Shelter" was"
- "he produces for his sister [Billie] [Eilish]"." → "[Finneas] produces for his sister [Billie Eilish]"." and add the wikilink to her in the way that it is done
- "while he mentions that it's" → "while mentioning that its"
- "stated that with "Shelter" it" → "stated that the song"
- "and calls the production" → "and he called the production"
- Wikilink uptempo per MOS:LINK2SECT
- "mentions the song" → "mentioned the song"
Promotion
[edit]- Wikilink music video
- "was directed by Sam Bennett and was uploaded to" → "was uploaded to" to avoid repetition
- Remove the word "official"
- "while shot in" → "while it was shot in"
- "It begins with" → "The visual begins with"
- "through the Los Angeles river" → "along the Los Angeles river"
- Remove the "wearing" part since that is totally unsourced
- The lyrics that Finneas is quoted as crying are not the ones that 14 instates; fix this
- "turn to shove and toss him roughly around the riverbed." → "try to tug and toss him roughly around the empty riverbed, as well as mobbing him."
- "Grease and praised the choreography," → "Grease, while praising the choreography,"
- "he performed from the EP" → "from the EP that he performed live"
- The tour info is not backed up by the ref
- "In October 2019, Finneas perfromed" → "In October 2019, Finneas performed"
- "the Austin City Limits Music Festival and was backed up" → "the Austin City Limits Music Festival, being backed up
Release history
[edit]- See MOS:TABLECAPTION
- Format → Format(s)
- Digital download and streaming should be separated in the table
References
[edit]- Copyvio score looks great at 11.5%
- Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
- Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 3
- Ref 6 is not the correct ref, since you should be citing one that verifies the release of the song as a single, not its music video's release and cite various retailers with the countries in brackets
Final comments and verdict
[edit]Kyle Peake, thank you so much for the review! Lmk if anything else needs to be done. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 07:32, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
- The Ultimate Boss This looks a lot better, but there is still no source for the song being performed on tour. --K. Peake 07:50, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake, oops sorry. Fixed. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 08:03, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
- The Ultimate Boss ✓ Pass now, good job! --K. Peake 08:08, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake, oops sorry. Fixed. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 08:03, 23 October 2020 (UTC)