Talk:Shattered Glass (Britney Spears song)/GA1
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Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 04:11, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- Dablinks - one found and fixed
- ELs are clean
Lead
[edit]- Add "Unusual You" as the A-side in infobox
- Not done I think that only works for the singles template. I tried putting it in, but nothing showed up. I might be doing it wrong. --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:01, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- Strange, I thought it had the parameter. Take a look at my proposal if ya want to. :D
- Great idea! Hope they change it, since there are a lot of charted B-Sides out there. --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:34, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- Strange, I thought it had the parameter. Take a look at my proposal if ya want to. :D
- Release date in infobox should be September 15, 2009
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:01, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- In the second sentence you should use the stage names for Dr. Luke and Benny Blanco so that readers do not think their were five people involved, instead of three
- Done Changed to Lukasz "Dr. Luke" Gottwald and same for Blanco. --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:01, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- Link teen-pop, dance and disco
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:01, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- Link Auto-Tune
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:01, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- Link B-side
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:01, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- Link Unusual You
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:01, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- Link component charts to Billboard charts
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:01, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- Link the different charts
Background and composition
[edit]- Reduce File:05 Shattered Glass.ogg to about 65kbps and less than 17.2 seconds
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:24, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- Per WP:SAMPLE it still needs to be trimmed to less than 10% (17.2 seconds). Adabow (talk · contribs) 06:51, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- AGH Can't believe I forgot that in the first place. Used a completely different portion of the song to match the new time frame. Fixed --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:33, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- Per WP:SAMPLE it still needs to be trimmed to less than 10% (17.2 seconds). Adabow (talk · contribs) 06:51, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- The caption is a mess - rewrite it
- Fixed --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:24, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- Link pop
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:24, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- Link guitar
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:24, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- Link rift
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:24, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- What is a "jagged" verse?
- Well, since I'm pretty sure they were speaking of her vocals, I changed it to "jagged and distorted vocals in the chorus" --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:24, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- Auto-Tuned in lead, auto-tuned here - be consistent
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:24, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- "though it has been noted" - by who?
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:24, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- "The song takes influences from teen pop..." - takes influences?
- Fixed Change to "contains elements of" --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:24, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- The sentence about lyrics is exactly the same as in the lead
- Fixed Less detailed in sentence in the lead. --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:24, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- You now have "the song is very emotional" in the lead, which is not said later, and sounds to be the opposite of what the song is. Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:00, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- Fixed "Lyrically, the song has varying emotions in its lyrics, speaking of flirting, betrayal, and a sense of entrapment as well as self loathing in her relationship with fame." --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:24, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- You now have "the song is very emotional" in the lead, which is not said later, and sounds to be the opposite of what the song is. Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:00, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
Reception
[edit]- Repeating the quote in the image caption is a bit POV
- You need to identify writers here, as newspapers don't form opinions; their writers do
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- said the song and 'Womanizer' "use their pulsing..." - Womanizer should have double quote marks ("), and reword so that you don't have two quote marks next to each other
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- The Daily News ref should be next to its quote
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- Link Billboard charts
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- No, it isn't. Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:06, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- How do you know that it is digital downloads? Maybe include a bit about the Digital Songs charting here
- Because it has to be. There is no sign of any other kind of release her except for digital download on the album. --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- OK, but I maintain that the Digital Songs info would be better up here. See...errm...Bigger (Justin Bieber song) for an example. Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:06, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- Billboard has failed to show that Shattered Glass charted on its official website, so we can't compare it to other songs from Circus. Anyway, it says nearly the same thing. --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:21, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- OK, but I maintain that the Digital Songs info would be better up here. See...errm...Bigger (Justin Bieber song) for an example. Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:06, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- Link Billboard Hot 100
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- " remaining on the chart for that week" - remove
- Fixed Changed it. Now say "before dropping off and reappearing for the week of..." --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- "and then reappearing the week after next" - a date would be better
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- The Billboard ref does not support the statement
- If you are speaking of the weeks it charted, you will need to look at the visualizer using the arrow on the left
- It confirms that it was on the "iLike" chart for 2 weeks, but nothing about Hot 100. Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:25, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- lol I'm blind. Fixed Used allmusic and aCharts instead. Also removed that it was there for two weeks, since I guess it isn't true. --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:17, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- It confirms that it was on the "iLike" chart for 2 weeks, but nothing about Hot 100. Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:25, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- "was also able to chart" → charted
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- pop chart → Pop Songs
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- digital songs → Hot Digital Songs
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- Link Canadian Hot 100
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- "and thirty-six" → and number thirty-six
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- Canadian digital songs chart → Hot Canadian Digital Singles
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
Track listing
[edit]- What happened to New Zealand?
- Done
- Link Unusual You
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 23:14, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
Credits and personnel
[edit]- Link names
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 23:13, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- Link vocals to singing (for Spears)
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 23:13, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
Charts
[edit]- Why not use the Billboard page for refs?
- Because Billboard fails to properly archive most songs that are not singles that chart. --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 23:11, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
References
[edit]- The dates are incorrectly formatted here. Either YYYY-MM-DD or Month Day, Year
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 23:10, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- MM and DD mean put a '0' in front of single-digit month/day numbers. Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:19, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- Sorry, I've always done it a different way, so. Fixed --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:12, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- MM and DD mean put a '0' in front of single-digit month/day numbers. Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:19, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- Popmatters → PopMatters
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 23:10, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- Discogs is not reliable
- Removed --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 23:10, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- ABC News is not in print; unitalicise
- It's not italicized as far as I can see when looking at it in the "work" section of the cite. --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 23:10, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- Acharts is unreliable
- Not done Per WP:GOODCHARTS when there is no other way to substitute an unlicensed chart, it may be used. --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 23:10, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- What about [1]? Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:11, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- Oh, I didn't even think about it being in the Biggest Jumps/Falls sections. Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:06, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- Now that you have alternative sources, please remove the acharts ref. - last thing to do, and then I'll pass. Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:38, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 00:49, 11 March 2011 (UTC)
- Now that you have alternative sources, please remove the acharts ref. - last thing to do, and then I'll pass. Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:38, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- Oh, I didn't even think about it being in the Biggest Jumps/Falls sections. Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:06, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- What about [1]? Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:11, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- Please add publishers to refs (if applicable)
- Since many of the "works" over lap with "publishers" they are listed as "publisher" --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 23:10, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- I can see Billboard and About.com which need publishers added. Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:19, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- Oh, sorry. Fixed --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:06, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- I can see Billboard and About.com which need publishers added. Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:19, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- Remove the main Britney navbox
- Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 23:10, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
Summary
[edit]- Not too good a start, some work to do. I'll put the review on hold for seven days. Adabow (talk · contribs) 04:11, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
- Also, the release notes for Unusual You will not contain the release date. Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:21, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- Fixed. For some reason, the Hung Medien site was removed. --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 21:48, 10 March 2011 (UTC)