Talk:Shadows (Agents of S.H.I.E.L.D.)/GA1

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Reviewer: Miyagawa (talk · contribs) 20:36, 2 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Grabbing this one for a review. First off, great job on getting Pilot (Agents of S.H.I.E.L.D.) to GA - I'd created that article in the hope that someone else would take up the mantle for the (as it was then) new series, and you did just that. I haven't had any involvement with other articles related to the series, so I think I'm independent enough to review this one.

Lead: "Also guest starring are" switch the "are" with "were", as you switch from past to present tense in that paragraph.

The content sort of necessitates a tense change there. I've rewritten it to try and make it read better.

Lead: It could do with a few words abbreviated from the music subsection.

I'm not quite sure what you mean by this.

You've summarised the other sections quite well, but there isn't any mention of the music part of the article in the lead. I don't think anything longer than "The music in this episode was composed by Bear McCreary, which included the use of Christopher Lennertz' work from the Marvel One-Shot Agent Carter. Miyagawa (talk) 08:43, 3 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Ah, I see. Done

Production: Given the length of the Development subsection, I'd just roll it into the writing section and call it "Development and writing", especially since part of Development is about the writers.

Done

Casting: The second sentence of the second paragraph is really long, being effectively a list broken up by commas. Would there be any means of breaking it up a little?

I've had a go, but it might be a bit difficult to break it down more. This episode has a few more guest stars than usual, but I don't think it really reads as too much.

I've more commonly seen the information in release rolled into the reception section, but I guess there's nothing wrong with this approach.

Cite #5 needs to have Entertainment Weekly in italics

Cite #3 and #9 are from Marvel.com - one of them is listed as Marvel.com, while another is simply Marvel. Should be one or the other.

Cite #13 is missing the source information

Cite #20 - no italics on IGN (also Den of Geek in other cites)

Italics needed for The A.V. Club (it feels like I'm saying these almost at random, but I'm basing the formatting off the relevant articles.

I think I got all of them, let me know if I missed anything.

I think that's everything. The free use image is probably 50/50, but based on the MCU tie-ins subsection, I'll stay on the side of keeping it. You might have fight for it at some point though. Placing this article on hold for the normal seven days. Miyagawa (talk) 20:36, 2 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for this Miyagawa, and it was seeing that pilot article that got me interested in making all of these and getting them up to GA, so thanks for that as well! I've made some changes to the page and responded to your comments above, just let me know if there is anything further. - adamstom97 (talk) 00:05, 3 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

No problem, I've added a little more about the music summary in the lead above, once that's sorted then I think this is good to go. Miyagawa (talk) 08:43, 3 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Great, I've seen that new edit and so I'm happy for this one to be promoted now as I believe it meets all the GA criteria. Miyagawa (talk) 13:22, 3 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Cool, thanks again Miyagawa! - adamstom97 (talk) 13:38, 3 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]