Talk:Seth Neddermeyer/GA1

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Reviewer: Ian Rose (talk · contribs) 04:55, 6 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Should be able to get to this by the w/e. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 04:55, 6 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Toolbox checks -- no dab or EL issues.

Prose/content

Copyedited so pls let me know any concerns.
"In mid-June 1944, Kistiakowsky’s report to Oppenheimer about the dysfunctionality within the implosion team led to the ousting of Neddermeyer and his replacement." -- this reads a bit oddly as you say in the next sentence Neddermeyer was replaced by Kistiakowsky; I assume you mean Neddermeyer was ousted and replaced, not that he and his replacement were ousted... If the former, suggest you just drop "and his replacement" as it's not really necessary.
Re-worded this. Hawkeye7 (talk) 02:50, 9 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Structure/images/sources -- no issues I could see.

Nice succinct article, I felt that the importance and issues re. plutonium/implosion were expressed very well. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 23:24, 8 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for that. I am very fond of his mug shot, which I think is one of the best. Hawkeye7 (talk) 02:50, 9 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

It is a good shot! Passing now. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 03:51, 10 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]