Talk:Serval/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Dunkleosteus77 (talk · contribs) 03:38, 16 June 2016 (UTC)

Comments by Dunkleosteus77

• does "cat" have to be wikilinked? Wikilinking is generally for unknown terms, and I'm fairly certain everyone knows what a cat is (optional)

• That's just a customary link to Felidae. I will remove it if you think it is improper.

I’d say keep it, to distinguish the taxon from the more familiar meaning of “housecat” (F. catus), in case a careless reader should mistake it for a domestic breed.—Odysseus1479 21:36, 26 June 2016 (UTC)

• Don't start a sentence with a number, spell it out. I haven't checked the entire article for this but I see one in the lead.

• Done

• change "golden yellow to buff" to "golden-yellow to buff" or "golden yellow-to-buff" depending on what you mean here

• Done

• the last sentence of the first paragraph of the lead confuses me. Try using semi-colons instead of commas and reword a couple passages

• Split into two.

• wikilink "vlei rats" to "Otomys"

• Done

• change "in different parts of the range" to "in different parts of their range" (optional)

• Done

• expand IUCN on the first time using it and put the acronym in parentheses next to it

• Done

This is just the lead, more comments on the way   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  03:38, 16 June 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for taking this up. I will respond to all the comments in the next few days. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 11:30, 16 June 2016 (UTC)

@Dunkleosteus77: Apologies for my delayed response, I have responded to all the points above. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 06:29, 23 June 2016 (UTC)

• translate "Die Säugetiere in Abbildungen nach der Natur mit Beschreibungen" and put it in parentheses next to this

No idea about German... Google Translate gives "The mammals in illustrations after nature with descriptions". I had better not do it.

• I don't understand what "Pocock identified three races of the serval" means; could you list the races?

Sorry that is all I could access. "Race" means "variety", the source uses the word.

• don't use {{convert}} in or next to parentheses, otherwise it'll turn out like "Males are 50 centimetres (20 in) (but females tend to be 45 centimetres (18 in))"

Fixed two cases, the only ones I could find

• I think the Threats and conservation and Relationship with human beings sections should be one section

Not sure, WP:MAMMAL is obscure on this. I did the same at Caracal.

References

• for ref no. 3, how did you get page 540?

Fixed

• be consistent in using OCLC numbers

I'm not using OCLCs, Template:MSW3 has it attached. OCLC consistency is not really something mandatory I think.

• ref no. 13 shows an error, ref name Johnson2006 is defined multiple times

Fixed

Final comments

• I don't think countries are supposed to be wikilinked

OK done.

• duplinks:
  • phylogenetic
  • caracal (on the cladogram)
  • African golden cat (on the cladogram)
  • Lynx (on the cladogram)
  • oestrus

Removed phylogenetic and oestrus. I have retained the other three as links are typically kept on the cladogram even if they are duplinks. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 02:35, 27 June 2016 (UTC)