Talk:Sergey Brin/GA1

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Reviewer: Ritchie333 (talk · contribs) 10:46, 14 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'll give this a go. No obvious reason to quickfail anywhere, so I just need to go through and check all the content and references carefully. --Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 10:46, 14 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Reference 3 redirects to www.techrepublic.com and the original source seems to be inaccessible

deleted.--Wikiwatcher1 (talk) 02:21, 17 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Reference 5 doesn't directly contain the quotes cited. The article's title does say "knowledge is always a good thing—and that more of it should be shared", but not "knowledge is always good, and certainly always better than ignorance"

Reference has quote in body. --Wikiwatcher1 (talk) 02:21, 17 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Sergey's birth date isn't directly cited to a specific source in the lead, the infobox, or the opening paragraph of the main article - reference 7 has it, so not a real issue.

Added reference. John F. Lewis (talk) 19:32, 17 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Reference 6 and 7 doesn't appear to cite that his mother was a researcher at the Goddard Space Flight Center, though the other information in that sentence is cited. Reference 9 does cite it, however, so again, a minor issue.

Source added. --Wikiwatcher1 (talk) 18:15, 17 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

The quote "Jews were excluded from the physics departments" looks like it's attributed to Michael Brin, but it's not a direct quote, and appears to come from author Mark Malseed, who wrote the article cited in reference 9.

Quotation marks removed. --Wikiwatcher1 (talk) 18:15, 17 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Reference 13 doesn't cite any education prior to enrolment at the University of Maryland

Education before 1990 removed until a better reference can be found (Search revealed 0 results for before 1990). John F. Lewis (talk) 15:58, 26 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"Together, the pair authored what is widely considered" - "wideley considered" is weaselly

Removed. John F. Lewis (talk) 16:07, 26 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Quote in reference 5 : "crammed their dormitory room with cheap computers" is actually ""crammming their dormitory room with cheap computers"

Changed. John F. Lewis (talk) 16:25, 26 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Google's motto : "of making all the world's information 'universally accessible and useful" needs a citation. A quick search brings up a number of sites that appear to have simply copied this article.

Added Reference and changed as the motto is incorrect. Source: Google Company Website. Feel free add a new source if found. John F. Lewis (talk) 16:25, 26 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Is reference 16 a reliable source?

Despite being an self published paper, it covers the information that it is citing and Sergey and Larry are not claiming to be experts without knowledge in the actual subject. I don't believe it goes against the policy WP:RS nor do I believe it complies. Ill leave this for someone else. John F. Lewis (talk) 20:50, 26 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Per WP:MOS, the last two single-sentence paragraphs in the section "Search engine development" could be combined

Combined in effect. John F. Lewis (talk) 14:30, 29 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Reference 5 doesn't seem to cite that Brin "hoped that some day everyone would learn their genetic code"

Removed. Also the reference is number 6 not 5. John F. Lewis (talk) 14:30, 29 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Not sure exactly what reference 20 is citing?

Removed. Reference 20 I believe is a off-topic note used as reference instead of a note. John F. Lewis (talk) 14:30, 29 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

The article states the January 2010 cyber attack "included accessing numerous Gmail accounts". But reference 22 states "Only two Gmail accounts appear to have been accessed"

Solved. Updated the information accurately.

The quote starting "a primary goal of the attackers" is attributed to the New York Times, but actually comes from reference 22 - which is Google's official blog

All references around that quote are attributed correctly.John F. Lewis (talk) 14:42, 29 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Neither reference 24 or 26 contain the quote "winning it praise in the U.S."

Removed invalid information. John F. Lewis (talk) 14:42, 29 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

References 27, 28 and 28 are all dead links, and should also all be formatted in the {{cite web}} style, rather than a direct URL.

Removed 27 as a deadline, 28 is still valid and is in the cite web template. John F. Lewis (talk) 15:00, 29 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Reference 30 doesn't cite Sakharov's first name - change to "obvious to [Andrei] Sakharov"

Reference attached to Sakharov does cite Sakharov's first name. John F. Lewis (talk) 15:00, 29 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"And in 2004" should read "In 2004"

Changed. John F. Lewis (talk) 15:00, 29 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Reference 33 is a dead link and needs {{cite web}} formatting (similar to above)

Removed. John F. Lewis (talk) 15:14, 29 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Brin's receipt of the Academy of Achievement's Golden Plate Award has no citation

Added a citation from the website. Only valid once I can find so far. John F. Lewis (talk) 15:14, 29 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

The NSF group's quote starting "he has been" actually starts "he was", "praised Google [of]" should read "praised Google in"

Corrected. John F. Lewis (talk) 15:14, 29 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Reference 37 has some problems with its formatting

I have formatted some references that were incorrect. I think I sorted reference 37 out. If not, Point it out to me again. John F. Lewis (talk) 15:14, 29 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Found and fixed the problem. John F. Lewis (talk) 16:03, 29 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

The "Other Interests" section has several one sentence paragraphs. These should be either combined together, or expanded. The single short sentence about Project Glass in particular could be expanded to give a brief summary about what it is.

I have combined a few sentences and expanded Project Glass using the Wikipedia page. John F. Lewis (talk) 15:59, 29 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Reference 40 is cited to the sentence "the first "offshore wind farm" in the United States". But the reference itself says "About a dozen offshore wind farms are proposed for the region."

Corrected. John F. Lewis (talk) 15:59, 29 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Investment in Tesla Motors needs a citation

Citied. John F. Lewis (talk) 15:59, 29 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

The paragraph beginning "Brin has appeared on television shows..." is not cited to anything

Removed information, Searched and could not find anything to use as a citation. John F. Lewis (talk) 15:59, 29 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Reference 43 is cited for the sentence "So far, Space Adventures has sent seven tourists into space". But the reference itself states "Space Adventures, the only company that sends tourists to space, has sent five of them so far."

Updated. John F. Lewis (talk) 15:59, 29 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Neither reference 44 or 45 mentions Brin has a Dornier Alpha Jet, and the $1.4 million figure in the article is $1.3 million in reference 45

Updated Information and added reference for the Dornier Alpha Jet. John F. Lewis (talk) 15:59, 29 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Reference 47 is a dead link and needs to be {{cite web}} formatted.

Seems to be fixed, I can't find a dead link that is not formatted with cite web. John F. Lewis (talk) 15:59, 29 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

And that's it! I'm putting the review On hold to give you a chance to resolve these issues. --Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 16:44, 24 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, I've checked through everything and it's a pass. Well done. --Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 11:05, 2 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]