Talk:Secret (Madonna song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 03:18, 2 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The single cover images needs an alt description
Most mentions of an official YT music video are done either here or in "External links"; you can either keep it here or move it below–it's your call

Add "recorded" before "by American singer and songwriter..."
Add "an" before "additional writer on the track was Pettibone."
Add "has" before "mixed pop and R&B genres with..."
- This is fine I believe, I changed it to "Secret" combined.... —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 10:05, 6 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The "her" in "her previous short films" is unknown who is being talked about (since Madonna has also technically released short films); to clarify the pronoun I would replace "her" with "McDaniel's"
"Nightclub" is one word

The use of "drawing" before "comparisons" sounds awkward to me; I think it would be fine if you removed "drawing" altogether
Rest is good

There are only two sources in this entire paragraph, not to mention eight sentences

Link Billboard here since it's the first mention of it in the article, minus the lead

Change to "Chris Wade, author of The Music of Madonna recalled that "Secret" had been his favorite song, and commended the track's production, Madonna's vocals and mixing; he declared it as "one of Madonna's finest cuts from the whole of her 90s output."" please
Change to " Matthew Rettenmund wrote in his Encyclopedia Madonnica that "Secret" paved way a new direction musically for Madonna; he believed that the track was more haunting musically than Madonna's previous single "Who's That Girl" (1987) and comparable to "Justify My Love" (1990)." please
- I didn't understand this, it is exactly how you have said. :S —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 10:05, 6 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The difference was with a semi-colon; I'll switch it for you. Carbrera (talk) 12:26, 6 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

You could add a topic sentence similar to what is mentioned in the lead; something along the lines of ""Secret" was a commercial success worldwide." Let me know what you decide to do
Nothing else here

Staying where? On the UK charts for ten weeks? Or at position five on the UK charts for ten weeks? Please clarify
Add a comma after "French Singles Chart" please
Add another comma after "In Austria" please

You would use "on" if it was just one date, but since it was filmed over a span of three days, I would instead say "The video was filmed during September 9–11, 1994..."
Shouldn't it it be "finished within three days", not "finished within two days" since it took a total of three days to film?

No 'titled' certification for the UK, yes?
- Nope, sadly she has over 75,000 copies to be sold to be even silver in the UK. —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 10:05, 6 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Great article! On hold for seven days, without a doubt it will pass with a few minor changes. Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 18:06, 4 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Done all for now. —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 10:05, 6 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for responding swiftly, I have already read over it all. Thanks again. Carbrera (talk) 12:26, 6 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]