Talk:Sean Couturier/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 22:57, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

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Prose

Lede

No reason to have the opening sentence also be it's own para. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:10, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed Moved the details of his draft to the first paragraph, in line with other ice hockey GAs
when he failed to make the Quebec roster - does this mean that he didn't belong to the team? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:10, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed Clarified that it was a failed tryout — Ghost River 13:08, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
link draft. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:10, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Done — Ghost River 14:46, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Hockey League (QMJHL). Following a modest rookie season, Couturier scored 96 points as a 17-year-old in the 2009–10 QMJHL season - no need to use an acronym here, can just say 09-10 season. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:10, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Done — Ghost River 13:08, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
and he signed with the team that year. The rules of his contract allowed Couturier to play with the Flyers for a ten-game "trial period" - not really "allowed", as he didn't have much option. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:10, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed — Ghost River 13:08, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
paired with Steve Downie - paired how? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:10, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed Clarified that they played together on the same offensive line — Ghost River 13:08, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
2013–14 and 2014–15 seasons - can we link the individual seasons? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:10, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Done — Ghost River 13:08, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
link concussion. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:10, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Done — Ghost River 13:08, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
, taking home the Frank J. Selke Trophy in 2020 - looks like he won a lot more than that in the body Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:10, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed Expanded upon the last sentence — Ghost River 14:46, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
No info on his international play? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:10, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed Struggled with how to integrate effectively; added two sentences, one on junior and one on senior international career — Ghost River 14:46, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

General

The succession boxes at the bottom seem a bit weird, are these not more suitable to a template? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:16, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- I'm not sure what you're asking – the succession boxes are how the ice hockey project navigates these things, and there are no equivalent templates. — Ghost River 14:46, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  - I would say it's something worth discussing with ice hockey project. It seems odd having a succession box for an annual award, or the first pick, when you could link them all with a template. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 16:14, 11 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
baseball and basketball at École Secondaire Népisiguit - probably worth saying this is a school. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:16, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Done — Ghost River 13:08, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Most Valuable Player. - this is used again in prose, so you can use MVP. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:16, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Done — Ghost River 13:08, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
during the skills competition - pipes to a redirect. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:16, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed — Ghost River 13:08, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
2012–13 NHL lock-out - Lockout. Also in lede. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:16, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed — Ghost River 13:08, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Couturier with the Flyers in 2012 - is next to the 2014-18 section Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:16, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed — Ghost River 13:08, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Review meta comments

I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 22:57, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Lee Vilenski All comments have been addressed, except where noted. Thank you for the review! — Ghost River 14:46, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]