Talk:Sean B. Carroll/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wretchskull (talk · contribs) 20:40, 4 December 2021 (UTC)

Trying to get eliminate more old GANs from the biology section. I'll have a look at this tomorrow. Wretchskull (talk) 20:40, 4 December 2021 (UTC)

Many thanks as always. Chiswick Chap (talk) 20:44, 4 December 2021 (UTC)

@Chiswick Chap: Sorry for the delay!

No worries!

Lede

• Eliminate refs from lede.

• Done.

• You can expand the lede with concise info about his awards.

• Done.

Career

• I feel like this section is a little to list-y and monotonous; prose form is preferred. If it isn't possible, just ignore this.

• Done a bit of reorganising, with a new Awards section.

• "Carroll's team has shown, in a series of papers, how the activation of genes during the embryonic stages of the Drosophila fruit fly control the development of its wings, and has been searching for the butterfly's counterparts of these genes." this sentence is unclear.

• Edited.

• "The Day the Mesozoic Died" has a third-party link in the middle of prose. It does not have its own WP article, so maybe put it in external links?

• Removed the link.

Selected works

• The ISBNs are inconsistent. Either change all to hyphenated 10-digits or hyphenated 13-digits. You can use the ISBN tool.

• Done.

Reception

• Second paragraph is a little unclear.

• Edited.

References

• Please add the year of publication to all refs if possible, such as The New York Times refs, where the exact date is shown.

• Added.

• Spotchecks: references are WP:RS and support all text.

• Noted.

• You may optionally add "|url-access=subscription" to sub-based refs.

• Noted.

General

• Lede image is properly formatted, article is well-summarized, neutral, and stable.

• Thanks.

• The article uses mdy dates, but is inconsistent, with ymd dates appearing across the article.

• Fixed.

• No copyvio found, however, the article is rather closely paraphrased with this ref - try to alter sentences here and there if possible.

• Edited.

Ping me when you have addressed my comments. Wretchskull (talk) 19:21, 6 December 2021 (UTC)

• Wretchskull - all done to date. Chiswick Chap (talk) 20:25, 6 December 2021 (UTC)

@Chiswick Chap: This article has been promoted to GA status. Wretchskull (talk) 20:32, 6 December 2021 (UTC)