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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 18:57, 8 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewing this for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive MWright96 (talk) 18:57, 8 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Lead

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  • Wikilink junior hockey to the relevant article
    •  Done
  • "Following his sophomore season in the OHL," - OHL needs to be spelt out in full and the acroynms in parentheses
    •  Done

Early life

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  • "to play junior in the Ontario Hockey League (OHL)." - word-to-word of the nj.com that will need a little rewording to pass limited wording
    •  Done
  • Wikilink lacrosse
    •  Done

Youth

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  • The second wikilink for Oakville, Ontario is not needed
    •  Done
  • Goals and assists need to be wikilinked on the first mention for non-Ice hockey readers
    •  Done
  • "Laughton also skated in two games with the St. Michael's Buzzers of the CCHL." - The full name of the CCML will need to be written out
    •  Done
  • "As a result of his minor hockey play," - achievements
    •  Done
  • "His play earned him a roster spot on the CHL/NHL Top Prospects Game[12]" - a comma is missing between "Game" and the citation
    •  Done
  • Wikilink point to the relevant article on the first mention only
    •  Done

Professional

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  • "giving the Flyers five more games to decide whether he stays in the NHL or returns to major juniors." - remained in the NHL to returned
    •  Done
  • "after failing to stick with the NHL club to start the season." - more formal; remain
    •  Done
  • "for Team Canada at the 2013 World Junior Ice Hockey Championships." - Team Canada's U20 team
    •  Done
  • "during the week of October 20." - phantomshockey.com source says the week ending October 19
    •  Done
  • "and was expected to miss 3–4 weeks" - 3 to 4 weeks
    •  Done
  • "the Flyers re-signed Laughton to a two-year, $1.925 million contract worth $962,500 annually." - the salary is not mentioned by the NHL source
    • Replaced ref
  • Wikilink penalty killer to the relevant article
    •  Done
  • Think the final paragraph can be split into two with the Laughton's activities in the Stanley Cup in its own paragraph
    •  Done
  • "Laughton suffered a broken finger at the start of the 2019–20 season" - perhaps mention it was a broken finger on his right hand
    •  Done
  • "A few games following his return," - how many games exactly?
    •  Done. Changed to December
  • "The team rewarded his efforts by gifting him the 2020 Pelle Lindbergh Memorial Trophy as the team's most improved player." - repetition of "team"
    •  Done
  • "When the NHL returned to play," - mention the season was delayed due to the COVID-19 pandemic as stated in The Hockey Writers
    •  Done
  • Wikilink Seed to Seed (sports)
    •  Done
  • "Laughton helped the team bounce back from a blown lead" - recover from a lost lead
    •  Done
  • Wikilink shorthanded to the relevant article
    • Already WL for penalty killer
  • Wikilink shutout
    •  Done

References

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  • Reference 6 is missing the author
    •  Done
  • Reference 18 is missing The Canadian Press as the agency
    •  Done
  • The hyphens in season in Reference 27 and the score in Reference 48 should be en dashes (–) per MOS:DASH
    •  Done
  • The author of Reference 38 should be formatted as Friedman, Elliott and the wikilnk be in the authorlink= field
    •  Done
  • Reference 46 is missing Associated Press as the agency
    •  Done
  • Reference 47 is missing the author
    •  Done
  • The first word in the title of Reference 51 should not be all in capital letters per MOS:ALLCAPS
    •  Done

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 20:41, 8 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

MWright96, done. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 01:21, 9 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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