Talk:Scott Baker (right-handed pitcher)/GA1

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Reviewer: SNUGGUMS (talk · contribs) 00:17, 3 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"is an American professional baseball starting pitcher who is a free agent"..... awkward phrasing
If including height and weight in lead, they shouldn't just be thrown in right after the introductory sentence
Per MOS:LAYOUT, it doesn't look good to have one short paragraph followed by one large paragraph. Try evening them out and/or splitting the second paragraph into two

Per MOS:SLASH, this would be better as "High school and college years"
MOS:LAYOUT discourages sections/subsections that do not exceed a short paragraph, so I'd expand this section. It would be good make this into an "early life" section by including his life prior to high school, his upbringing, and family that he grew up with

The contents in this section are best merged per MOS:LAYOUT, which discourages one-sentence paragraphs.

"2005 season", "2007 season", "2008 season", "2009 season", and "2010 season" have reasonable lengths, but the rest are too short per MOS:LAYOUT. Expand them or merge with other sections.

Minnesota Twins

Per MOS:LAYOUT, it's best to make this all one paragraph or even out the two paragraphs used
"Baker was called up on May 3, 2005"..... something about "called up" doesn't seem right
"He was recalled again"..... either the article neglects to mention when Baker was previously recalled, or this should be "called again" instead

"He threw just 11 pitches in the start"..... is "just" really the best word choice?

"However, after two starts Baker returned to a long relief role"..... I'd put "after two starts" at the end of this bit

The URL in FN23 links to a general site and doesn't specifically talk about Baker
"Twins.MLB.com", "Rangers.MLB.com", and "MLB.com" should be Major League Baseball
Baseball-Reference.com should not be italicized, and no need to include "(Minors)" in FN2
"ESPN.com" should read ESPN and not be italicized
Per WP:OVERLINK, Major League Baseball should only be linked in FN1, Baseball-Reference.com in FN2, and ESPN in FN19.
"Associated Press" isn't needed for FN's 19, 51, and 52
NBC Sports should be linked in FN50, and should not be italicized there or in FN54
"TwinCites.com" (FN64) should read St. Paul Pioneer Press in italics
"startribune.com" (FN65) should read Star Tribune in italics
YouTube (FN66) is generally discouraged as a source
ESPN and MLB are used quite often, try having more diversity within the references

Well-written?: too many short paragraphs throughout the article, fails MOS, prose could be better
Verifiable?: one incorrect URL and one discouraged source
Broad in coverage?: the "pitching style" is a decent start for his player profile, but is not complete. See articles like Derek Jeter and Trevor Hoffman for good examples. A major problem is how there is nothing on Baker's family, his upbringing, how he became interested in baseball, or anything on his life prior to high school.
Neutral?: not quite
Stable?: no concerns
Illustrated, if possible, by images?: the image used (seen in infobox) is relevant and appropriately licensed, but the caption should be more descriptive- give a time frame and something more specific about where he is
Pass or Fail?: this is going to need a considerable expansion and lots of rewriting to be up to par with GA criteria, so I'm failing this without putting the nomination on hold