Talk:Saturday Night! – The Album/GA1

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Reviewer: EditorE (talk · contribs) 18:51, 10 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Looks like a pretty good article so far, but here's some comments.

Some rewriting suggestions

of top albums of 1987" ---> "of the top albums of 1987"

Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 20:42, 10 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"To composer the music" What?

Changed. Andrzejbanas (talk) 20:42, 10 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The word "described" is used way too much in the "Style" section.

Re-wrote. Andrzejbanas (talk) 20:42, 10 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"The track's lyrics involve a beef" Try using a better word, like "conflict".

Re-wrote Andrzejbanas (talk) 20:42, 10 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"where it charted on the UK Indie Charts for 10 weeks peaking at fourth position." ---> "where it charted on the UK Indie Charts for 10 weeks peaking at number four."

Re-wrote Andrzejbanas (talk) 20:42, 10 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"Saturday Night" and "Dedication to All B-Boys" charted in the UK Indie Charts. ---> ""Saturday Night" and "Dedication to All B-Boys" appeared on the UK Indie Charts.""

Re-wrote Andrzejbanas (talk) 20:42, 10 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"Robert Christgau gave the album a B rating, on reviewing the Jive release of the album, " ---> "Robert Christgau gave the Jive reissue of the album a B",

Changes this too. :) Andrzejbanas (talk) 00:30, 12 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Other comments

"Spin Alternative Record Guide (1995) gave the original release an eight out of ten and the Jive re-release a nine out of ten.[5]" This should be in the ratings table then.

Wasn't sure which to include in this list here as Spin gave about three reviews to the album and I don't know which is most representative. The first is a negative review from the magazine, the second is from the Spin Alternative Record guide, which marks both the "Schooly-D Records" version and then the version with bonus tracks released by Jive Records. Only the last two have a number rating. Which should I include? The review box doesn't make it too clear which version of the album is being reviewed, so I decided to let the prose speak for itself.Andrzejbanas (talk) 20:42, 10 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

- You don't have to include just one rating from that book. You are allowed to include all of the ratings, just make sure you specify which release of the album each rating is for. 和DITOR E tails 03:00, 13 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

和DITOR E tails 18:51, 10 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Okay! Added. Andrzejbanas (talk) 04:12, 14 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I'm still seeing most of the problems in this article after you said you already fixed them, including the confusing "To composer the music" statement" and the way-too-repeated use of the word "described" in the style section. I'm only noticing your change of the sentence about the Christgau Jive reissue review and your addition Spin Alternative ratings in the table. Please check this article and my comments again, Thanks. 和DITOR E tails 08:08, 14 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Weird. Did I not save it last time? Sorry about that. I've re-fixed them again. Sorry about that. Andrzejbanas (talk) 19:10, 14 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

That's OK, it's happened to me. Great work! Just one more thing before I can pass this: "When asked about him lyrics involving commanding a woman to "do it doggy style" in his song "Do It Do It", Weaver stated that the lyrics as a reflection of his background and audience, and not necessarily how he feels about others" The grammar of this sentence needs to be fixed. 和DITOR E tails 01:19, 15 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Actually, never mind, I've fixed it already for the sake of time. I'm passing the article, awesome work!