Talk:Satin berrypecker/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: AryKun (talk · contribs) 09:32, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 20:36, 5 August 2024 (UTC)

Reviewing now. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 20:36, 5 August 2024 (UTC)

• The satin berrypecker (Melanocharis citreola) is a species of passerine bird in the family Melanocharitidae. The species was described in 2021 by the Spanish ornithologist Borja Milá and her colleagues. – I feel the first two sentences are a bit too technical. In the first sentence, instead of "in the family Melanocharitidae", it would be more helpful for the general reader to state where it is found. Also, when mentioning Melanocharitidae, I also would give the common name of that family. The second sentence could come a bit later, too.

• Tweaked it a bit; Melanocharitidae doesn't have a common name (berrypeckers and longbills isn't exactly great).

• rump, vent, retrices, crown etc. all need wikilinks (e.g., to the birdgloss).

• Done.

• The satin berrypecker has not yet been assigned a conservation status – the taxonbox says "least concern".

• Completely missed that, I was writing the article off the BOW account that was published before the IUCN assigned a status.

• but tentatively assigned to the similar mid-mountain berrypecker – if this is a separate species, link?

• Done.

• mist-netted – explain/link?

• Linked.

• Add distribution map? Fig 2 in the first description has one, could just be cropped. Alternatively, you could use fig. 1 outside the taxonbox, as it illustrates the geography of the mountain range and names such as "bird neck" that are used in the article, it would be very helpful.

• The distribution map apparently isn't free use, it says used with the permission of Lynx Edicions in the caption. Added the mountain range map tho.

• Cladogram would be great (ideally simplified and wikified).

• Done.

• late Miocene – "Late Miocene"?

• Done.

• link "clades", "malar line", "primaries", "secondaries", "vane", "gape", "rictal streak"

• Done.

• The throat, breast, belly, and vent bright satiny-white with – In Wikipedia, we need full sentences without obmitting the verbs (even though the diagnosis sections in papers like to do it this way).

• Done.

• As in adults, the outermost rectrix has a white patch on its outer vane, but it is washed grey internally and excludes the rachis – "it is" refers to the "outermost rectrix", but I was wondering if you want it to refer to the "white patch" instead?

• Yes, tweaked.

• The satin berrypecker's are poorly studied – word missing ("vocalisations" maybe)?

• Fixed.

• An adult male collected in November had enlarged testes. – This needs either more explanation or should be removed. An ornithologist might be able to use this information (i.e., estimate the timing of the breeding season), but the general reader certainly cannot, and is completley helpless with that piece of information. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 21:14, 5 August 2024 (UTC)

• Fixed.

• Jens Lallensack, sorry for the very delayed response, see my replies above. AryKun (talk) 18:41, 24 August 2024 (UTC)

  Looks good! Just one additional point: You now write "minimally deforested forests", which sounds strange to me; if something is "deforested", than it's no longer a forest by definition. Maybe write "minimally deforested areas"? Jens Lallensack (talk) 18:52, 24 August 2024 (UTC)

  Done. AryKun (talk) 19:36, 24 August 2024 (UTC)

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