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January 11, 2022Good article nomineeListed
Did You Know
A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on August 30, 2019.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that shortly after the arrest of the leaders of the Indonesian National Party, Sartono disbanded it and founded the Indonesia Party?
On this day...A fact from this article was featured on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "On this day..." column on October 15, 2022.

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 10:12, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Nominator The man from Gianyar (talk · contribs) at 09:30, 8 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

GA criteria

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GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):
    b (citations to reliable sources):
    c (OR):
    d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):
    b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

Overall:
Pass/Fail:

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Comments

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General

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 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 10:41, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Detailed

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  • politician and lawyer — un-link, these are everyday words.
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 11:00, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 11:00, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 11:00, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • Indonesian National Party on all instances except the first one in lead and prose should be replaced by PNI
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 11:00, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • BPUPK — is never again used in the lead. Do we need to define the abbreviation?
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 11:00, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • People's Representative Council — except the first instance, it should be "DPR"
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 11:02, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • Was "Sartono" his full name. What is "Mas" in "Raden Mas Sartono"?
Raden Mas is a compound title, a combination of the title Raden and Mas. So it is not his full name. Will delete. – The man from Gianyar (talk) 11:00, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • While his mother, was a — remove 'While' and the comma
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 11:00, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • If his mother was a decedent of " Prince Mangkunegara III", we should not use "also"
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 11:00, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • at the Europeesche Lagere School (ELS) — 'ELS' is never again. Do we need to define the abbreviation?
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 13:52, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • he was easily accepted — I'd remove 'easily'
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 13:52, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • He arrived in Batavia at Kemayoran Station. — Important to mention? I see this and him travelling with his father as trivia info.
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 09:00, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • On various instances, "Sartono" can be replaced by a suitable pronoun.
ω Awaiting – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:58, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 07:17, 11 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • He received the blessings of his parents — Trivia; remove.
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 09:00, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • Together with his friends from Leiden, Iskaq Tjokrohadisurjo, Budiarto Martoatmodjo, and Soenario. — incomplete sentence
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 09:00, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • a man named Jasin. Jasin — repetition of Jasin. Better merge those two sentences
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 08:09, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • What was the impact of his speech on "freedom of association and press"?
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 08:09, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • four of PNI's leaders – who were sentenced to prison time — change to "four of PNI's leaders, later sentenced to prison time"
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 08:09, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • Sartono himself was not arrested, — remove 'himself'
ω Awaiting – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:58, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 00:35, 4 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • he became an advocate for the Swadeshi movement — It links to Indian Swadeshi movement. Was he associated with it? If so, we'll need context as to how did associate with India.
ω Awaiting – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:58, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I've added Around the same period, the Swadeshi movement in Colonial India began capturing the attention of the many politically active Indonesians. This included Sartono, who became an advocate for the movement, and also chaired a commission on the movement within Partindo. is that enough? – The man from Gianyar (talk) 07:05, 11 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • and in 1933 the party's — comma after 1933
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 13:38, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • "almost immediately" — almost immediately after what?
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 08:09, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • He was not elected for the position in April 1947 — do we mean that he lost the election?
 Done — The man from Gianyar (talk) 06:32, 4 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • During the Dutch–Indonesian Round Table Conference, Sartono was a general adviser — should be "Sartono served as a general adviser during the Dutch–Indonesian Round Table Conference"
 Done — The man from Gianyar (talk) 06:32, 4 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • on 21 February 1950 — comma after 1950
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 13:38, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • without success — "unsuccessfully'
 Done — The man from Gianyar (talk) 08:04, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • and the Indonesian Communist Party in addition — comma after 'Party'
 Done — The man from Gianyar (talk) 08:04, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • Do we know the dates for his acting-presidential tenure in December 1957?
According to the source he took office on 20 December 1957, but thats it, no end date. Its a bit ambiguous, don't you think? – The man from Gianyar (talk) 13:31, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Yes, in that case, leave it as it is. Thanks for clarification, though. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 13:45, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • After several years of unemployment — should be "After several years of being unemployed"
 Done — The man from Gianyar (talk) 08:04, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

That is it. Nice work!

Images

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 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 07:17, 11 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 08:30, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The book was published and distributed by the Government of the Republic of Indonesia. — The man from Gianyar (talk) 08:04, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

References

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  • Suggesting to hyphenate ISBNs, using this tool.
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 13:43, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

That is it! Putting on hold. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 11:08, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

We are almost done, just a few things left. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:59, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
@The man from Gianyar: @Kavyansh.Singh: FYI, I added a paragraph and a half or so. Juxlos (talk) 11:56, 11 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I'm fine with it as long as all that is cited! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:11, 11 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Everything looks good; promoting. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:16, 11 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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