Talk:Sarah Stewart (basketball)/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 15:47, 14 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Apply all the comments I've made on these sorts of articles:
- Lead length.
- Reference formatting.
- WP:DASH compliance
- etc.
- See Talk:Clare Nott, Talk:Leanne Del Toso, Talk:Sarah Vinci... etc.

Then we can talk! The Rambling Man (talk) 16:03, 14 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

It should be fine now. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:21, 19 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comments plus

Is it 3 point or 3.0 point?
- Y 3.0 player, but when they talk about the 3 point class, they mean 3.0 and 3,5 point players. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:07, 24 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Not sure we should be wikilinking common geographical terms like London or Australia.
- Y Unlinked Australia, kept London for consistency with other cities. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:07, 24 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"League (WNWBL) an the National Wheelchair" typo?
- Y Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:07, 24 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"since 2002.She has" space needed?
- Y Added. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:07, 24 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"2012, 2010, 2009, 2008 and 2004" etc. Chronological order is preferred.
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:07, 24 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Career highlights include being" not exactly prose, more of a CV, perhaps rephrase for normal lead prose.
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:07, 24 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Sarah Stewart was born on 13" no need to repeat Sarah.
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:07, 24 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"This resulted in her being in a wheelchair" no, it resulted in her needing to use a wheelchair for mobility.
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:07, 24 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Again, check for "She... She... She... She..." which makes for dull prose.
- Y Always a problem with any biographical article. Tried to reduce this. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:07, 24 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"In 2004 she earned the Sydney... " new para so "In 2004, Stewart...
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:07, 24 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Razorbacks.[11][3]" ref order. Check others.
- Ref order is sensitive to small editing changes. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:07, 24 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
" 52-44" en-dash. Please fix this issue in the other GANs you have to save me from having to comment on each and every one every time!
- Y Done. Will be checking the others in due course. If you want to raise an RfC to get rid of the ndashes and mdashes, I'll vote for it. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:07, 24 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"She was part of the silver medal " -> "Stewart was part of the silver medal-winning team".
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:07, 24 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
List stats table in chronological order (again, please do this in all other GANs).
- Y I have to update the bot. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:07, 24 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Why is PTS not in bold (again....)
- Y Corrected the bot. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:07, 24 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Avoid SHOUTING in the refs (e.g. ATHENS)
- Y Another bot artefact. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:07, 24 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Still on hold. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:39, 24 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

All points addressed. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:07, 24 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]