Talk:Santos Escobar/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 07:37, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

"While working for Lucha Libre AAA Worldwide, he won the AAA Fusión Championship, and AAA World Cruiserweight Championship in 2014," - this sentence would be better off ending with a period
"and the AAA Latin American Champion, and Copa Antonio Peña in 2017." - reword this sentence to say Alcantar was the AAA Latin American Championship, and won the Copa Antonio Peña in 2017.
"Prior to working for AAA he worked for Consejo Mundial de Lucha Libre (CMLL) from 2008 to 2013." - close repetition of the word "worked"
"for the U.S. based Lucha Underground promotion from 2014 to 2019." - U.S.-based
Delink U.S. per MOS:OVERLINK

"Alcantar began his professional wrestling career on July 4, 2000," - not mentioned by the SuperLuchas source. Please use another citation to verify this sentence
"revealing that he was the son of El Fantasma to the wrestling world." - the text in bold is better off moved to after the first word of the portion of this text

"after he left International Wrestling Revolution Group in 2004." - the text highlighted in bold should be written as IWRG since the acronyms are mentioned in the previous subsection
"During his CMLL time," - his time in CMLL,
"Despite never having teamed previously," - before
"after only one successful title defense since July," - July 2009
"Garza kept insincerely insisting that he was still a tecnico and that his team was getting along great." - change the text in bold to a phrase that is more formal
"Garza complained that his partners agreed to the match without asking him," - agreed to contesting the match
Dragón Rojo, Jr. doesn't necessarily need the comma per MOS:JR
"the highest profile match Hijo del Fantasma had competed in thus far in 2012." - that year

"he made it to the finals of the Copa Antonio Peña," - italize Copa Antonio Peña
"Fantasma won the 2017 Copa Antonio Peña tournament, which meant he also won the vacant AAA Latin American Championship." - repetition of the word "won"
"initially over the Latin America champions," - American
"At Triplemanía XXVI, held on August 26, 2018, L.A. Park defeated El Hijo del Fantasma in the Poker de Aces match. After his loss, El Hijo del Fantasma was forced to unmask and reveal his real name, Jorge Luis Alcantar Bolly, to everyone watching." - both sentences are not supported by the MedioTiempo source attached to them. Please find reliable source(s) that support the conent

"In October 2014, Hijo del Fantasma began working for Lucha Underground under the ring name "King Cuerno" (Spanish for "King Antler" or "King Horn")," - The Internet Wrestling Database states this happened in September 2014
"King Cuerno started a feud with Drago and, on January 21, 2015, King Cuerno defeated Drago in a Last Man Standing match. On February 4, 2015, King Cuerno attacked Johnny Mundo, initiating a feud between them. The rivalry was apparently concluded on the March 11, 2015 episode when Mundo and King Cuerno wrestled in a Steel Cage match, which was won by Mundo." - these sentences are unsupported by Wrestling Observer Newsletter, and require reliable sources to verify them
I think Death Match has no capital letters and is one word
"He was released on March 26, 2019." - please state whom exactly release the wrestler on this date

"to defeat Lewis Howley and Sam Stokerat on a show in Fort Pierce. Florida." - please avoid violating MOS:SEAOFBLUE in regards with the text highlighted in bold

"Distrito Federal Light Heavyweight Championship (1 time)" - this achievement is lacking a reliable source to verify whether it is correct

Reference 26: "[Johny Mundo becomes AAA triple champion]" - typo; should be spelt as Johnny
Reference 30 should have Super Luchas as the work not the publisher
The same issue as above exists for Reference 38
Reference 40 should state that it requires a subscription to access
Please substitute the IMDB reference for one that is reliable per WP:CITINGIMDB

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to action/respond to the queries raised here. MWright96 (talk) 08:56, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

MWright96 - I have address all issues except for those where sourcing is needed. I'll fire up the ol' Google and find suitable sources in the next day or so. MPJ-DK (talk) 15:17, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Turns out it was even easier to source, two out of the three issues had sources in other articles and I found the third one quickly. MPJ-DK (talk) 15:27, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  - @MPJ-DK: Now promoting to GA class. I have made a few changes to the article. MWright96 (talk) 17:09, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]