Talk:Sanne Keizer/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sportsfan77777 (talk · contribs) 01:16, 14 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this one. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 01:16, 14 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

After a four-year hiatus, Keizer returned to full-time competition ~~now~~ partnered with Meppelink.

Early life, education, and family

Not a big deal, but maybe call the section "Personal life"?
She was called to the junior national water polo team ~~at some point~~ (or state the year or her age at the time, if available)
she wanted to continue playing a ball game <<<=== I think "ball sport" is the more common term?
obtained a HBO diploma <<<=== obtained "an" HBO diploma

Career

The duo did not progress past the qualifying rounds in Hellas and in their next four events <<<=== "...or in their next..."
they fell short of their No. 6 seed to finish ninth ===>>> "and finished ninth"
2011 was a breakthrough year for the pair ===>>> "The 2011 season" was a breakthrough year for the pair
they were temporarily setback ===>>> they were temporarily set back

Style of play

Is it possible to add a "Style of play" section like in your other GAs?

Career statistics

In the performance timeline, there should be a column titled 2014–17 to show the gap during her hiatus.

Overall

Everything looks sourced.
No bare refs.
No dab links.
All of the links work.
No plagiarism detected.

Overall, the article looks pretty solid. The biggest comment is to add a "style of play" section. Everything else is minor. Placing on hold. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 01:45, 14 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Sportsfan77777: Thanks for the review. There shouldn't be a problem adding a style of play section, but I probably won't be able to work on this until this weekend. Bennv3771 (talk)

Sure, no problem! Sportsfan77777 (talk) 07:10, 14 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Sportsfan77777: I think I've addressed all the issues you raised. The only thing I left unchanged was the section title for "Early life, education, and family", which I prefer over "Personal life" as I think it some of the content it covers doesn't really fall under "personal". Let me know if there's anything I missed or if there are new issues to be addressed. Thanks again for the review. Bennv3771 (talk) 02:25, 19 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good! I tweaked two things, and am passing the review! Sportsfan77777 (talk) 02:35, 19 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]