Talk:Sandra Peabody/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 23:32, 20 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 23:32, 20 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

First and second sentences in the first paragraph need sources (recite if necessary).
The last part of the sentence ending in "The Virgin Spring (1960)" needs a source.
Is the phrase "then scripted blonde" necessary?
The first mention of Craven in prose should be Wes Craven.
The two references after "positive reviews" don't seem reliable and go to the same link to Arrow in the Head.
The sentence ending with "funny film" needs a source (recite if necessary).
I would remove the word "extremely" as it doesn't sound Wikipedia-ish.
The sentence ending with "rape scenes" needs a source.
The second source after "throughout the shoot" doesn't seem reliable.
The words Last House should be in italics in the quote block.

I would suggest combining the first two paragraphs since they're both kinda short.
Remove the comma after "Vinegar Syndrome".
The sentence ending in "(1973)" needs a source.
Is there a word missing in-between "when was"?
Try trimming the use of quotes in this section.
Is the description of Teenage Hitchhikers necessary.
If it is, "freedom, excitement, and independence" doesn't seem like a neutral phrase.
Move the reference from the Los Angeles Times to the end of the sentence.
Combine the last two paragraphs (too short) and find a source for the sentence ending in "assistant editor".
In this section and in others, be consistent on whether you're referring to her as "Sandra" or "Peabody".

Try removing uses of "In [year]" as it feels repetitive and out of place.
Is the quote block about being an acting coach necessary?
"the Portland, Oregon and Los Angeles, California areas" → "areas around Portland, Oregon, and Los Angeles"

The sentence ending in "pursued drama" needs a source.
I would suggest combining the first two paragraphs since they're related.
The last paragraph was already mentioned in the quote block so I would move it to the subsection above #Personal_life as a reason she left acting.

Archive all archivable sources (manually or using this or this).
Mark references from Los Angeles Times with "|url-access=limited".
Mark references from The New York Times with "|url-access=limited".
Some references say that they are from Newspapers.com, while others don't. Try to be consistent.

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Hey @The Baudelaire Fortune: Noticed you addressed all of my suggestions so I am passing the article's GAN. For future reference, try notifying the reviewer of the GA when you address their comments by simply pinging them (example: {{ping|Some Dude From North Carolina}} will notify me with @Some Dude From North Carolina:). Also try to add comments to the GA nomination itself, as this page was in my watchlist and any edits would have appeared in it. This helps me see your progress and will result in the article being passed sooner. Anyway, thanks for improving the page, since it's now a good article. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 20:39, 28 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]