Talk:Sand Point and Middle Hope/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 09:57, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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The area, in the lead it's hectares/acres, in the infobox it's hectares, sq metres, sq miles, it's all a little mixed up.
- Made the same.— Rod ^talk 21:14, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Any reason for three paras in the lead on such a brief article?
- Each dealt with different topics but made into two paras.— Rod ^talk 21:14, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Any reason for the solitary reference in the lead? I assume it gets expanded upon and referenced later in any case?
- Moved to geology section.— Rod ^talk 21:14, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"Notification" of 1952 is mentioned in the infobox and the category, but nowhere in the article, seems like an oversight.
- Now in history.— Rod ^talk 21:14, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"At Middle Hope a sequence of carboniferous limestone, and includes limestones," grammar fail.
- Reworded.— Rod ^talk 21:14, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"finest Tournaisian carbonate sections in South West England." sounds POV, is there a quote to back this up?
- Prudden's Good Rock Guide says it is "a very special place", but I've removed that claim.— Rod ^talk 21:14, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Does "The site contains a Pleistocene-aged fossil cliff and shore platform" really need three separate references?
- All the sources talk about this as being a key feature.— Rod ^talk 21:14, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
You abbreviate "millions of years ago" to "myr" but that abbreviation is never used.
- Removed.— Rod ^talk 21:14, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
" the Middle Hope 84.1 hectare" needs a hyphen, and no need to re-link hectare.
- I've removed this and covered it in history.— Rod ^talk 21:14, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Be consistent with your pipelinking/redirects, so the lead has " biological and geological Site of Special Scientific Interest." redirecting to "Site of Special Scientific Interest " while " biological and geological Site of Special Scientific Interest" piped to the same.
- wp doesn't have separate articles for each type of SSSI.— Rod ^talk 21:14, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Avoid over-capitalising plants like Common Gorse and Bramble, they just don't need those caps.
- The MOS seems to change on this every time I look at it - hopefully caught them all now.— Rod ^talk 21:14, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"A bowl barrow and disc barrow from the late Neolithic or Bronze Age have been identified." where, when, why, how? This is a strange way to open a sentence in a new section.
- Reworded.— Rod ^talk 21:14, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"The triangulation station and site of the bowl barrow and disc barrow." incomplete sentence, no full stop required.
- Full stop removed.— Rod ^talk 21:14, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
" as it was well away from the men of HM Customs and Excise" sounds like it should be a quote, it's not encyclopaedic otherwise.
- Yep a quote from Gallop.— Rod ^talk 21:14, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"Woodspring Priory is a former Augustinian priory.[21] The priory" priory, priory, priory.
- I've removed one and reworded, but I can't see how to avoid "Woodspring Priory was an Augustinian priory".— Rod ^talk 21:14, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"who were influenced by the Cistercians who emphasised" who ... who. Repetitive.
- Reworded.— Rod ^talk 21:14, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"and now rent" timeframe?
- Since the 1990s.— Rod ^talk 21:14, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Normally things like "HMS Birnbeck" are "HMS Birnbeck".
- Done.— Rod ^talk 21:14, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Our article calls it a Department of Miscellaneous Weapons Development (department) rather than a Directorate.
- Changed. (I think the title has changed over time).— Rod ^talk 21:14, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"as an Explosives and Shock Test Facility" no need for all those capital letters.
- Now lower case.— Rod ^talk 21:14, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Be consistent with ISBN spacings.
- Hopefully done now (I think some automated programme changes them).— Rod ^talk 21:14, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I'll put the item on hold for a while. The Rambling Man (talk) 20:40, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Cool, I'm good with the changes so happy to promote to GA, nice work. The Rambling Man (talk) 07:15, 1 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]