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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 04:34, 16 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

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1. Prose ✓ Pass

2. Verifiability ✓ Pass

3. Depth of Coverage ✓ Pass

4. Neutral ✓ Pass

5. Stable ✓ Pass

6. Illustrations ✓ Pass

7. Miscellaneous ✓ Pass

Comments

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addressed all issues in this section. Newtack101 (talk) 19:34, 16 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

2.

  • ""spelling books, silk, hats, silver, and even tailor-made suits,"" This is phrased as a quote but isn't the exact quote
  • For the ref concerning the quote above, it's better to link to the exact document [1] than the page you have to navigate through to get to the article.
  • "October 10, 1774, The Battle of Point Pleasant was fought between the Virginia militia and Indians from the Shawnee and Mingo tribes along the Ohio River, with the militia emerging victorious." - Citation needed
  • "The months following the Dunmore's War saw tension rise between the British and the colonies. Lord Dunmore dissolved the House of Burgesses in May 1774. This lead the Burgesses to form the extralegal Virginia Convention." - Citation needed
  • "Mathews was elected to the Virginia State Senate for the inaugural session of the Virginia General Assembly, the successor to the House of Burgesses. He represented Augusta, Rockingham, Rockbridge, Shenandoah, and Pendleton counties.[21]" - This gives the impression that he represented all of these countries during that first session, but he didn't represent Pendleton until 1790, which was 10 years removed from the rest of his terms.
  • " Arnold evacuated Portsmouth by sea.[citation needed]" - Citation needed
  • "#Grigsby 1890(2), p. 88" - The hashtag appears in front of a lot of the Grigsby reference, I don't believe it should be there.
  • " Clem, Gladys B. (1965)"It Happened Around Staunton in Virginia"(Staunton, Virginia: Second Edition) p. 21-23" - Is there a way to insert a space between (1965) and "It Happened ..." ?
  • The page ranges should have endashes, not the short dashes.
  • Is ref 1 a book or an article? If it's a book, add an ISBN if one exists, if it's an article, add where it was published in
    • yes it's a book, but an obscure one. I haven't been able to find an ISBN number, but have added an OCLC
  • The book name in ref 8 needs italicized, and a location should be added if one is available.
  • Refs 12, 13, and 14 need accessdate parameters.
  • Ref 16 needs an accessdate
  • Ref 21 needs an accessdate
  • The publisher for the Founders Online refs should be the National Archives, not the United States government
  • Refs 28, 30, 31, 33, and 34 need accessdates.
  • "Chalkley3, p. 149" - Why the 3? There's no indication of multiple volumes in the Chalkey refs
  • Ref 43 needs an accessdate
  • The refs in the bibliography need to be alphabetized
  • "Henning, William W. (180)" - Looks like you're missing a digit in the year
  • " Glanville, p. 78" - This short ref is provided, but there's no long ref for Glanville in the bibliography
  • There's stray ref tagging after the last entry in the bibliography

all issues addressed Newtack101 (talk) 00:34, 17 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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  • The infobox and sources seem to indicate that Mathews was in the Virginia Senate in 1790, but this isn't mentioned Newtack101 (talk) 17:40, 16 April 2020 (UTC)in the article. It should be.[reply]
    • done. I'm not sure what to do in the infobox regarding the varying counties. Do you think I should add a new entry every year he represented a different set of counties, or leave it as is? Newtack101 (talk) 00:34, 17 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
      • I think it would be acceptable. I'm not an expert on the infobox standards for this infobox. If you plan on taking this forward to A-class or FAC, they might say something about that.

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Placing this one on hold now, I'll make another run through after these are addressed.

Hog Farm, thank you for your review. I have addressed everything in your initial review. If you spot any addition issues, and I'll be happy to address them. Newtack101 (talk) 00:34, 17 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I found one last thing. You have a ref to Kromkowski without any other context (43 I believe), but there's two separate refs to Kromkowski, so it's unclear which is referred to. Hog Farm (talk) 04:03, 17 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Gotcha. I went ahead and put the full Kromkowski reference in for (43). Also, just want to make sure you saw my question about the infobox above. Thanks. Newtack101 (talk) 12:29, 17 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I think that's everything. Promoting. Hog Farm (talk) 15:09, 17 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Informal review

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In response to a request on my talk page, I'd like to offer an informal pre-FAC review of this article. I didn't know anything about this person before reading the article, and know fairly little about the US Revolutionary War.

  • "As war came to the colonies" - wasn't there warfare against Native Americans from the start of European colonisation?
  • "a surprise raid of Richmond " - should this be "raid on Richmond"? The grammar seems off here.
  • "His parents were among the first settlers of Augusta County" - I imagine it was already settled, by Native Americans - should this be "first European colonists" or similar? (not sure what the situation in the US is, but modern works on colonisation in Australia go to considerable lengths to avoid this kind of wording given that it's now considered both inaccurate and offensive to suggest that Australia wasn't settled before Europeans invaded the place)
  • "worked in various crews" - not sure about "various" here - it seems needlessly vague.
  • "In fall of 1774" - should this be "In the fall of 1774"?
  • The third para of the Revolutionary activities section refers to "the ongoing war effort", but the outbreak of war hasn't previously been noted.
  • "the senate sought to promote the Continental Navy's Virginia fleet" - I'm not sure what this means: did they want to advertise it, or improve it?
  • "a three month tour" - I don't think terms like "tour" are typically used in reference to pre-modern warfare.
  • "In October 1780, Mathews requested to disqualify himself form serving the rest of his term in the Virginia State Senate" - do we know why? (also, this sentence is a bit wordy)
  • "and Arnold thereafter burned and looted the city." - surely Arnold's forces did this, not the man by himself!
  • The sources look reliable, but there's inconsistency in the footnotes: while most cites to books use the short form, the full details of some books are given.
  • I've made an example edit to address wordy language, and would suggest a read-through to identify other areas where the wording can be simplified
  • I'd suggest putting this article though a Military History Wikiproject A-class review before going to FAC: the ACR process is designed to provide preparation for FAC, and A-class articles have a much better chance of being passed at FAC. This should ensure that some reviewers more familiar with the American Revolutionary War than I am consider the article. Nick-D (talk) 23:25, 24 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Even though this is an informal review, I decided to address the comments as I would a formal review for sake of documentation. Newtack101 (talk) 13:28, 26 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Did you know nomination

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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:00, 7 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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Improved to Good Article status by Newtack101 (talk). Self-nominated (talk) at 17:37, 24 April 2020 (UTC).[reply]

Hi TheSandDoctor, thanks for reviewing this submission. I'm not sure if I know what you mean by time and distance not being mentioned -- do you mean the DYK hook is missing these things, or the article itself? Either way, I'm happy to make changes. Thanks, Newtack101 (talk) 12:19, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
@Newtack101: The article. Sorry I wasn't clearer. --TheSandDoctor Talk 19:52, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
TheSandDoctor Thanks. So, by time you mean January, and by distance you mean how far he had to march? Sorry, I'm struggling. Newtack101 (talk) 02:17, 26 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
@Newtack101: "160 miles through the Allegheny mountains in 19 days". 160 miles and 19 days are not mentioned in the article that I could see. --TheSandDoctor Talk 02:34, 26 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
TheSandDoctor Ohh, okay, I misinterpreted ALT1 as being the first of the two. My bad. The 160 miles in 19 days is in a direct quote towards the bottom of the Earl Life and Indian Wars section. "During nineteen entire days, this gallant band pressed forward descending from the height of the Allegheny mountains to the mouth of the Kenawha [sic], a distance of one hundred and sixty miles." Newtack101 (talk) 02:39, 26 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
(edit conflict) In that case, good to go. Thanks @Newtack101: and apologies for the confusion. --TheSandDoctor Talk 02:42, 26 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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