Talk:Sammy Vick/GA1

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Reviewer: Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk · contribs) 11:38, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Nice start! There are just a few things that will need to be addressed before this can be a good article.

His height was listed at 5 ft 10 in (1.78 m), and weighed 163 lb.,; change to He stood 5 ft. 10 in. (1.78 m) and weighed 163 lb.,
After playing one season minor league baseball--After playing one season of minor league baseball
Vick was signed by the Yankees, and used sparingly by them later that same season.
With Babe Ruth's arrival, and Bob Meusel emergence in 1920,--With Babe Ruth's arrival and Bob Meusel's emergence in 1920
Add comma after Tennessee in lead

I know Vick is an obscure player from several years ago, but can you find some more personal information on him? Was he ever married, did he have children, what was his illness, how long did he have it, what did he do after his baseball career ended, etc.? If you cannot find this information, don't worry about it, but it would improve the article.

Change semicolons in second sentence and second-to-last sentences of second paragraph to colons
Vick's production had a steady, slow decline; finishing the season change ; finishing to ; he finished
established players of Duffy Lewis and Ping Bodie, along with the emergence of Bob Meusel, a rookie.--Change to "established players Duffy Lewis and Ping Bodie, and Bob Meusel, an emerging rookie."
Remove comma from third sentence of third paragraph.
consisted of a .220 batting average while appearing in just 51 games; consisted of a .221 batting average in 51 games.

On December 15, 1920, the Yankees and Red Sox conducted a trade, with each team receiving four players. Along with Vick heading to the Red Sox, were Muddy Ruel, Del Pratt and Hank Thormahlen in exchange for Waite Hoyt, Harry Harper, Wally Schang and Mike McNally.--Change to "On December 15, 1920, the Yankees traded Vick, Muddy Ruel, Del Pratt, and Hank Thormahlen to the Red Sox for Waite Hoyt, Harry Harper, Wally Schang, and Mike McNally."

He batted .322, hit 16 home runs, as well as 21 doubles and 11 triples.--He batted .322 with 16 home runs, 21 doubles, and 11 triples.
he improved his average to .350 in 1927

Add MLB.com and ESPN stats to the template

Once these changes have been addressed, the article will be close to passing. Please leave a message on my talk page when you have completed the changes. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 11:38, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]