Talk:Salvation Army Headquarters (Manhattan)/GA1

GA Review

Passed. 750 h+ 14:17, 28 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: Epicgenius (talk · contribs) 00:30, 25 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: 750h+ (talk · contribs) 06:48, 21 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Guess I'll take this @Epicgenius: 750 h+ 06:48, 21 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

East of the office wing is the Centennial Memorial Temple. which has a triple-story opening whose design was intended to welcome visitors. Has a very prominent grammar mistake.
- Oops, I have fixed that. Epicgenius (talk) 16:35, 27 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
It may just be me being Australian, but should although Walker used brick and cast stone, as well as stepped archways, to create have a comma before "to"?
- In this case, yes. The comma balances out the comma after "stone", which makes the phrase "as well as stepped archways" a parenthetical expression. In other words, this could also be written as although Walker used brick and cast stone (as well as stepped archways) to create. The phrasing "...Walker used brick, cast stone, and stepped archways..." doesn't really work because stepped archways isn't a construction material. Epicgenius (talk) 16:35, 27 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Link facade
- Done. Epicgenius (talk) 14:03, 28 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Site

no problems here.

architecture

The office wing on 14th Street. ==> "The office wing is on 14th Street."
- I actually just deleted that phrase. It was supposed to be a comma rather than a period, but I then realized that it was redundant. Epicgenius (talk) 14:03, 28 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
By the 2010s, the dormitory had 199 rooms and catered to a wider range of women between the ages of 18 and 50, this is a full sentence. why is there a comma at the end
- Oops, I've fixed that. My default font renders commas and periods very similarly, so it's hard to distinguish between the two unless I look closely. Epicgenius (talk) 14:03, 28 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

history

March 1893, with the intention of erecting a six-story building dedicated to his mother. ==> "March 1893 to erect a six-story building dedicated to his mother."
prompted complaints from local residents. remove "local"
They formed a splinter group—God's American Volunteers, later Volunteers of America—with the intention of attracting Salvationists. ==> "They formed a splinter group—God's American Volunteers, later Volunteers of America—to attract Salvationists."
already contemplating a redevelopment remove "a".
- I have done all of these. Epicgenius (talk) 14:03, 28 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

critical reception

no problems here. 750 h+ 03:33, 28 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

image review

Five images in the article. They are all appropriately licensed and each have WP:ALT text. Image review pass. 750 h+ 03:56, 28 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

source review

Source review. Source quality seems fine using the Cite Highlighter script. Spot check incoming.

7 OK
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Source review pass. 750 h+ 06:00, 28 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review 750h+. I've addressed all the issues you've raised above. Epicgenius (talk) 14:03, 28 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

With the addressed comments I am happy to pass this article for

status. Well done! 750 h+ 14:17, 28 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.