Talk:Sally Jewell/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: JerrySa1 (talk · contribs) 00:27, 15 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this one, expect it finished by maybe friday. My first concern is that it's a little short, I see that it's a short topic, but I want you aware. [dispenser.homenet.org/~dispenser/cgi-bin/webchecklinks.py?page=Sally_Jewell#view:0.1.0.1.1.1 Found this from checklinks.] Copyvio not found in any degree except this sentence. " She graduated from the University of Washington in 1978 with a degree in mechanical engineering". JerrySa1 (talk) 00:27, 15 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for taking on the review! I have tried to alter the the sentence mentioned above to address your concern. Knope7 (talk) 01:13, 16 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

A note about stability, based upon my research of similar pages and consideration of relevant policies, I took the position that it is best not to add the successor to the infobox until the successor takes office. That was caused some revisions from editors. I have tried to reach out to everyone who edited the page and have left notes on the talk page. The issue will be moot in less than a week, but I wanted to explain as stability is a concern. Thank you. Knope7 (talk) 01:42, 18 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Knope7:, Sorry for not responding these days, I'm busy with tests and such, so I'll finish Saturday. I'll report back Friday, when you'll hear from me again, but there is still the issue of dead links.JerrySa1 (talk) 23:44, 18 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

No apology needed. When you have a chance, can you clarify what you mean by the issue of dead links? I see one dead link for a sentence which is also cited to another source. If you would like, I can just remove current reference 20 (Newsmeat). I haven't seen other deadlinks although I will take a look if you point them out. Knope7 (talk) 03:10, 19 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Knope7: Yes, that's fine, I think I have enough time to finish the review, I see it fitting to finish it before the president she was under leaves.

Links

Your suggestion is fine Done Knope7 (talk) 02:11, 20 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Ref. 3 and 5 are duplicates Done Knope7 (talk) 02:11, 20 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Ref. 10 has an existing internet link Done Knope7 (talk) 02:11, 20 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]
16 is dead I see 2 links for reference 16, the first is to archive.org and the second is to the original webpage. Both appear to be working for me. Knope7 (talk) 02:24, 20 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Knope7:, Lucky I got on this page just now, there is still the Miscellaneous section. JerrySa1 (talk) 02:26, 20 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Miscellaneous

"first planning to become a dental hygienist, then switching to pre-dental at the encouragement of a roommate." Source needed.

Source is ref 7, the same as the next sentence. The citation is actually hidden and visible in edit or edit source mode. My reading of WP:REPCITE says where consecutive sentences cite to the same source, only the last sentence needs the citation. Knope7 (talk) 02:39, 20 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"She worked in banking for twenty years, staying with Security Pacific, which acquired Rainier Bank, until 1992" Probably just me, but it sounds clunky

I broke the sentence up to make it easier to read. Please let me know if need further revision. Knope7 (talk) 02:59, 20 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

In 2005 she succeeded" should be "In 2005, she succeeded"

Done Knope7 (talk) 02:45, 20 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

In 1996 Jewell..." see above (a couple others in article.)

I think I got them all

Done Knope7 (talk) 02:45, 20 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"Sally Margaret Roffey was born..." Sally is a nickname. JerrySa1 (talk) 22:36, 19 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Done Knope7 (talk) 02:59, 20 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
see Mis. section
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
2a:see links section
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
There is nothing wrong here
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
no peacock terms and the like
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
You're right on stability
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Images used appropriately and can be used.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Yes, I'm passing this article. Congratulations, User:Knope7. JerrySa1 (talk) 03:07, 20 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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