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Reviewer: Eviolite (talk · contribs) 16:12, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I will be reviewing this one. eviolite (talk) 16:12, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Images:

  • Were all of the images published before 1927?
    Hello! Thank you for the ping. The photo info is as follows:
    • Infobox - downloaded from Flicker, released on a valid CC license
    The following 5 images were downloaded from [1] and dated as noted below.
    • Salt tram terminal - date: 1912
    • Piles of salt - date : 1912
    • Bob Crosby, et al - date: 1916
    • Twelve Mule team - date: 1912
    • Looking east - date early 1900s
    It seems that they are all either out of copyright because they were published before 1927, and the color image has a valid free license. BTW, I love the image with all the piles of salt, and agree with Vami VI that it is relevant to the content as salt is the very reason the tram was built, and this is how the product was stored onsite before sending off to market.
    I will read through the article again - it looks pretty clean, tho. I'm so pleased to hear it's a GA nominee! Netherzone (talk) 19:51, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
    @Netherzone: I guess my main concern was the images was the publication date, which is what matters - it's technically possible that smoe of these images were taken in the 1910s but weren't published until later. I'm not sure if that's findable or not, but it's likely fine? eviolite (talk) 23:08, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
    @Eviolite I have no idea about that, but perhaps someone more familiar with image use rules and policies would know. Or maybe an admin on Commons? I found all the historical images on the Owens Valley History website linked in my message above. According to the website they got the images from the Eastern California Museum. Here is what a disclaimer on the Owens Valley History main page says: NOTICE: All items on this website have been catagorized as fair use and are being displayed strictly for non-commercial and nonprofit educational purposes. Only one of the images has more specific info, and that is the one with the piles of salt and two standing men - the image caption is: "Photo Courtney (sic) of Rich McCutchan archives, Photo taken by Miles O. Bolser circa 1912-1913". There are two other salt pile images without any additional info located here: [2] and here [3]. Personally I don't think using these images is problematic. Hope that helps! Netherzone (talk) 23:28, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
    @Eviolite, @Vami IV -sorry for the additional ping, but I wanted to share this license which I think might apply, since the images have no copyright notice: [4] - its the "Public Doman US no notice license", and if I understand it correctly, I think it does apply to the images in this article. But maybe best to check with a Commons Admin? I am not a photo expert. Netherzone (talk) 23:40, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
    Alright. In any case it's not a big deal as the images can just be removed afterwards and that does seem reasonable enough. I've asked at c:COM:VPCOPY though. eviolite (talk) 02:32, 11 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • Are the images of the salt piles and the people relevant (rather than images of the tramway itself?)

Sourcing is good.

Lead:

  • Lead is a bit short. Also, the first sentence seems long winded, consider splitting into two ("The Saline Valley salt tram was an electric aerial railway in California, connecting Saline Valley to a terminus northeast of Keeler in the Owens Valley. It was constructed from 1911 to 1913 to carry salt from Saline Valley over the Inyo Mountains", maybe)
  • It could also cover the specific companies that used it and that it was very expensive to construct.

Gotta go for now, will finish later. eviolite (talk) 16:40, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Comments for body:

Construction and operation:

  • Much of this section appears to be more about background info with the history of salt mining there and other plans. Consider splitting this into two sections, one about background, or also mentioning background in the section title. Or maybe just "History".
  • Is "occupied" correct here? It doesn't sound right to me but wouldn't be surprised if it is.
  • comma after "In 1902"
  • "over 1903" - "from"?
  • comma after "Thereafter"
  • I feel like "Workers were obliged to live out of tents while the work itself, often taking place in 100 °F (38 °C) heat, required the reconstruction and extension of a road on the western slopes and a team of eight horses for pulling supplies" wants to be two separate sentences as it's conveying two things (that conditions were bad and they had to sleep in tents, and that the work required building a road and horses.
  • "The Sierra Salt Company reopened the operation in 1925 but did not use the tram until 1929; it had been repossessed in 1920 by the Trenton Iron Company, who sold it in 1928 to the Sierra Salt Company." - something goes wonky with the chronology here; it talks about 1925-1929 and then events that happened in 1920, and I think it would be more straightforward to just go chronologically.
  • Give more info on "It was briefly reopened for the last time in 1954." - that it was a minor success by just a trio of people

Route and design:

@Vami IV: That's it for my comments, placing on hold. Generally a well-written article. eviolite (talk) 02:32, 11 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the edits Vami IV! A few things:

  • As for the "minor success" the source says In that year, three men, D. O. Morrison, J. J. McKenna and Tony Pinheiro, leased the operation from T. K. Temple of Los Angeles. The trio had only minor success with the facility hence my comments - was just wondering if any detail could be added. Of course as you have stated it was only brief so it doesn't matter too much and I don't think it should hold up the review.
  • You still seem to have a broken sentence at Construction was difficult; workers were obliged to live out of tents while the work itself, often taking place in 100 °F (38 °C) heat. required the reconstruction and extension of a road on the western slopes and a team of eight horses for pulling supplies.
  • As for the gallery photos: I think they're probably fine but we should probably wait for the experienced people on Commons... in the meantime what you could do is remove the gallery for now and re-add it if they are public domain - they aren't too crucial as there is a "modern" infobox image as well. eviolite (talk) 03:04, 12 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
    @Vami IV: Buidhe has now removed the gallery as it has an unknown copyright status so now I am happy with promoting it to GA. Again if it turns out to be fine I have no objections adding it back in. Great work! eviolite (talk) 22:55, 13 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
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