Talk:Salad spinner/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cryptic C62 (talk · contribs) 21:42, 17 June 2012 (UTC)

• I'm concerned that the article is too US-centric. The early patents were made by Frenchman, so why is there no mention of the French market? And what about non-Western cultures, do they use salad spinners?

• Another unanswered question: Do top-level chefs actually use this device? If so, can you give some specific examples?

• The History section seems to be incomplete. It presents the development of the device up to 1979 and then... nothing. Were there no improvements to the design in the past 30 years? Has the popularity of the device grown or shrunk in that time?

• I don't think that this article is a comprehensive summary of the available literature. A quick Google Scholar search reveals 3,000+ journal articles which could be of use for expanding this article. I'm not suggesting that you use all of them, but some of these journal articles indicate that the salad spinner has been used for other purposes, such as soil analysis, a concept which is not mentioned in the Wikipedia article.

• "Although the invention of salad spinner is considered to be modern, earlier devices, including one from the 19th century, did exist and performed similar functions." This is a very weird way to start a section. A much more natural way to begin would be to actually describe the 19th century model, not just mention it in passing.

• I encourage you to find a copyeditor to run through the article, as there are some obvious punctuation and phrasing issues throughout. Two examples:
  • "Jean Mantelet filed a patent for a "Salad Dryer" a hand-operated, centrifugally-driven device"
  • "Scaled-up, electrically driven spinners are more powerful version of the device."

Feel free to contact me if you have any questions about these issues. --Cryptic C62 · Talk 21:42, 17 June 2012 (UTC)