Talk:Sairecabur/GA1

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Reviewer: Ceranthor (talk · contribs) 18:21, 24 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Bit confused about the setup of the whole "volcano and associated mountain range" deal. Any way to tighten up the relationship in the lead?
"panish pronunciation: [sai̯.ɾe.kaˈbuɾ]; also known as Sairecábur, pronounced [sai̯.ɾeˈka.buɾ])" - is this redundant or is that just me?
"These volcanoes have erupted a number of lava flows. Licancabur, Putana and Juriques are neighbouring volcanic centres." - bit choppy; maybe try to rearrange or recombine these sentences?
"An Inca sanctuary has been found on Sairecabur. More recently, the Receiver Lab Telescope was placed on the volcano, where it is the highest submillimeter telescope in the world at an altitude of 5,525 metres (18,127 ft). The climate is dry, cold and very sunny." - Kind of reads like a miscellaneous paragraph. Anyway to better organize these items or reintegrate into the two above paragraphs?

I've no idea about the pronunciation. Otherwise, I think I got these. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 20:19, 31 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Jo-Jo Eumerus - Looks to me like the two pronunciations are identical. Or are my eyes failing me? ceranthor 19:37, 1 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"hese belts have different underlying crusts" - probably worth explaining briefly what "crust" is, or at least linking it
"have thus different typical magma compositions" should be "thus have" I think
"A number of stratovolcanoes can be found in the area, many of them are now ruins.[4]" - run-on; any elaboration on why they're now ruins?
"A work in 1950" - a little too vague; maybe "A 1950 publication"?
"These in the area of Sairecabur" - grammatically I think "those" works better than "these" here
"Sairecabur is constructed on the two Pliocene-Pleistocene Puripicar and Chaxas formations, some lavas have overrun the Purico formation,[10] " - "some lavas..." should be a new sentence.
"going from Escalante volcano south of Putana Volcano in the north to Sairecabur proper in the south" - kind of clunky phrasing here. Too many words such that it makes the precision less clear rather than more clear.
"several young lava flows formed south of this caldera." - this is a run-on as is; needs to be a new sentence or reformatted.
"one of these reaches the caldera bottom." - what "these" refers to here is unclear
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Petrology Escalante and Sairecabur have erupted dark andesites, later also dacites.[26] " - I'd add "and" before "later" here

"Such old age for the Chaxas ignimbrite" - awkwardly phrased; maybe better as "Such an old age estimate"?
"The lava formations named Post-Caldera Lavas I at Sairecabur are of Pleistocene and Post-Caldera Lavas II of Holocene age." - with the specific naming here, this sentence is quite unclear. Is the first "are of" meant to be there?
"The edifice this caldera formed on formed" - redundant phrasing?

"About 250 species have been found in the valley west of Sairecabur.[49]" - what does this mean? They've been identified there? They live there? More detail necessary! :)

That source was rather ... economical on details. I've added some other information. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 20:19, 31 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Ref 3 doesn't use initials for first/middle names but other sources do. Same with ref 8, 12, 18, 24, 38, 39, 44, 47, 52, 53, and 54.

Yeah, some sources have initials and others don't. I am loath to standardize these as there is often little indication on what the correct name might be. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 20:19, 31 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Why is the title for ref 38 in allcaps?
In sources, the Figueroa ref shouldn't have its title in allcaps either.
"Rudolph, William E. (April 1955). " and "Rudolph, William E. (October 1952)" should be switched, assuming you're going alphabetically.

Prose needs some buffing up. Refs and images look good! ceranthor 17:50, 31 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Jo-Jo Eumerus: Yup, I'm happy with the progress once the pronunciation thing is figured out. ceranthor 19:40, 1 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]