Talk:Saint-Louis-du-Louvre/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zwerg Nase (talk · contribs) 10:43, 1 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I will review this. Zwerg Nase (talk) 10:43, 1 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Here we go. The issues I believe need to be adressed are:

I have placed numerous ^{[citation needed]} tags all over the history section. Most of what you write seems to come from the second source you give. You will need to cite it more than once though to make that clear.
Lemoyne was given the commission by the family of Cardinal Fleury and the tomb remained unfinished at the time of the church's suppression. I am unable to find that last statement in the source you give.
In 1598, Protestant worship had been forbidden in Paris by the Edict of Nantes. In 1685, the Edict of Fontainebleau made non-Catholic services illegal in all of France. The source you give is quite a strange one. I am sure you could find a book writing about the persecution of Protestants in France? Also, and more importantly, your source does not give any info on the Edict of Fontainebleau.
There is the problem that often your sources do not lead to the page they are intended to, and you have to search for the information first. Very complicated. Maybe you can find a way to fix that. Also, with ref 10 I have shown you how you should place refs at every place where they belong.
Even though I am not really capable of understanding French, I am quite certain that ref #11 does not give all the information you give in the last paragraph. Please take care of the ^{[citation needed]} tags there.

I am placing this on hold for ten days. Zwerg Nase (talk) 18:15, 1 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Also, the talk page could do with some Project templates. Zwerg Nase (talk) 18:17, 1 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I actually have no idea why I wrote seven, of course I meant the usual seven days. But well, it's nine days now and nothing has happened, so unfortunatey, I am forced to fail this. Zwerg Nase (talk) 20:31, 9 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

My apologies for not responding in time, I moved houses this week. I saw the ten days listed and delayed my edits given that time frame. Would it still be possible to do the edits tomorrow and finish the process?Djkeddie (talk) 23:49, 9 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I've made the requested edits. Thank you for your careful review.

The statement, Lemoyne was given the commission by the family of Cardinal Fleury and the tomb remained unfinished at the time of the church's suppression, is referenced from the top of p. 96 in the citation, "He nevertheless did not create the monument, which was later commissioned of Lemoyne by the cardinal's family but was never completed."
I'm not sure how to fix the hyperlinks on google books to land at the correct page. I haven't found a way to do that but will continue to search for one.
I've removed the last sentence, which was properly sourced and added a reference for the choir stalls. The last sentence is sourced in the citation: "Devenue temple protestant en 1801, elle fut démolie en 1811, sauf certaines parties qui disparurent en 1850. La partie occidentale du pavillon Denon recouvre son emplacement."Djkeddie (talk) 00:24, 10 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@Djkeddie: I am sorry, but since I closed the review I cannot open it up again. But if you re-nominate the article I will take over the review and go over it again :) Zwerg Nase (talk) 07:17, 10 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, sorry for the delayed response.Djkeddie (talk) 13:40, 10 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]