Talk:S by Shakira/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Prism (talk · contribs) 18:22, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Gift nº 3. :) Prism △ 18:22, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Dude you're on a roll --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 18:43, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

General

Disambiguation links: Not present.
Checklinks: Correct these external links.

Corrected. --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 18:43, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Original research: Not present.

In depth

1. Lead

I don't understand this sentence: "Along with the original perfume, S by Shakira Eau Florale was promoted by Shakira at a press release in Paris, France, in March 2013." What does this really mean? They were both promoted in the same press release?

I made it simpler to read now --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 18:43, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

2. Development 2.2. Scent and packaging

Remove quotation marks from blockquote and insert a dot in the end of it

Removed. --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 18:43, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

3. Release

"was available for purchase in more than 15,000 stores" → unclear. Worldwide?

I added the US part. --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 18:43, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

4. Flanker fragrances 4.1. S by Shakira Eau Florale 4.1.1. Background and scent

"packing" → packaging, no?

Whoops! --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 18:43, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Final comments

Well, this will be even faster than the previous reviews. A very nice read! Prism △ 18:22, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I can't thank you enough! You have cleared out so many of my pending reviews! I am drowning in debt! THANK YOU SO MUCH! --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 18:43, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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