Talk:SS Russia (1872)/GA1
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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 03:48, 18 January 2021 (UTC)
Link freighter in the first sentence of the lead to cargo ship, as that appears to be our article about freighters.Also link port and starboard, as those won't be familiar to readers not particularly knowledgeable about ships.I don't think its necessary to bold the ship's name in the design and construction section"Russia (Official number 110063) was built in 1872 in Buffalo, New York" - Which registry was this with?Link sister ships" She received her first enrollment in Buffalo on August 26, 1872" - Can it be briefly explained or linked as to what enrollment means in this context?Be consistent with if you use a comma for numbers in the thousands or not. For instance, 69,000 vs 3000"February 1, 1874, Russia was damaged by freshet in Buffalo" - Source says that it was her propeller that was damaged, so I think you should add that detail to the article."where she unloaded her coal" - How about "where her coal was unloaded", as the current phrasing implies that Russia unloaded her own coal." barrels of various dry goods and rumored 1909 motorcycles destined for Duluth, Minnesota" - I think motorcycles are well known enough they don't need to be linked per MOS:OVERLINK, and I think the link on 1909 can be dropped as that list is too vague to really help the reader out much"The same day Russia sank on Lake Huron, the bulk carrier Aurania sank on Lake Superior" - Unless there's a connection between the two sinkings, such as being caused by the same storm, I'm not sure if this is a relevant detail.We need a publisher for the Brand source- I did some spot checks which were fine, and the sources look okay for GA.
- Images all appear to be free and have valid sources (not a licensing expert)
I think that's it. Good work on this one, placing on hold. I did some minor copy editing, feel free to revert it if you don't like it. Hog Farm Talk 04:13, 18 January 2021 (UTC)
- @Hog Farm: Thank you. I have changed to "(US official number 110063)". None of the sister ships have articles. I plan to write an article for the redlinked sister ships, not the others. On the Great Lakes, using "propeller" in this context refers to a propeller driven ship.
Other that the ones I have mentioned, everything is done. GreatLakesShips (talk) 08:07, 18 January 2021 (UTC)