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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 17:20, 29 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]


Comments

  • "an iron hulled, American" why not "American iron-hulled..."?
  • "The first iron hulled" hyphenate again.
  • "Merchant was built in" could say "she was built in" as it's unambiguous from the previous sentence.
  • "manufactured in Black Rock, New York and" comma after NY.
  • "winter of 1872-1873" en-dash, and avoid using seasons as their timings differ depending on where you are in the world.
  • "a.k.a. the "Anchor Line"" also known as
  • "1875 while" comma after year.
  • "bushels corn" of?
  • "Racine, Wisconsin due" comma after Wisconsin.
  • Apply en-dashes to year ranges in infobox.
  • "1862 in Buffalo, New York, by the shipyard owned by David Bell " overlinked, and you already said that second bit.
  • "Black Rock, New York by" comma after NY.
  • "J.V.F. Wilson" space out J. V. F.
  • "50 psi" convert.
  • "14 miles per hour (12.2 kn" can you add kph too?
  • "launched ... launching" repetitive.
  • "the old measurement system was abolished" already linked above, but to a redirect.
  • "Malden, Ontario to prevent" comma after Ontario.
  • "winter of 1872 and the spring of 1873" see above, avoid seasons.
  • "(a.k.a. the "Anchor Line") " also known as.
  • "of Erie, Pennsylvania, which" overlinked.
  • "damaging her" which one?
  • In April... In June ... In July... mix it up little, perhaps "two months later" instead of "In June"?
  • "for Milwaukee, Wisconsin, with" overlinked.
  • "bushels corn" of?
  • "off Racine, Wisconsin at around" comma after Wisconsin.
  • "second mate" link.
  • "sank onto the reef in about fifteen minutes" any word on casualties?
  • "the summer of 1877" season.
  • "badly broken up and" why "badly"?
  • See also, those boat names need italics.
  • Six instances of spaced hyphens in ref titles which should be en-dashes.

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 18:09, 29 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: Done, with the exception of the seasons, which I don't see the problem with. GreatLakesShips (talk) 19:30, 29 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
See MOS:SEASON. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 19:31, 29 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@The Rambling Man: I don't know how to add kph to mph and kn. Aside from that, it is done. GreatLakesShips (talk) 10:18, 30 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]