Talk:SM City Davao/GA1
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Reviewer: Malleus Fatuorum (talk · contribs) 12:24, 29 September 2012 (UTC)
- This article really is dreadfully light, and fails to meet GA criteria 3a. In addition the prose needs some attention, and there is some too close parahrasing; one example is "... competently designed retail space to relax, explore and enjoy with the entire family", compared to "... efficiently designed retail space to relax, explore and enjoy with the entire family"here
Location and vicinity
- "A transportation terminal constructed beside the mall is to accommodate transient travelers." As opposed to permanent travelers? What kind of transportation? Buses, trains, taxis?
The Annex
- "The Annex is an expansion building of SM City Davao." What's an expansion building? An extension to SM City Davao?
The Cyberzone
- "It can only be temporarily accessed by using the bridge connecting the main building and The Annex and using the back entrance of The Annex." So you're only allowed to access it temporarily, as opposed to moving in and living there?
Incidents
- Excluding the lead, this section on one construction incident occupies about half of the article, and is covered in far too much detail. A sentence or two in a new Construction section would be more appropriate for a summary encyclopedia article such as this one. A few examples of what such a section ought to contain would include the architects, when building work started, who were the builders, what was on the site before, and any planning issues that had to be addressed.
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